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 Apr 24 2005, 06:35 PM
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 Want fries with that?  Group: Member Posts: 692 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,652  |
There’s always a voice inside me,
That screams and calls my name, This voice always says that I’ve done wrong, But am I the one to blame? I try to shut this voice out, To shut out all the screams, But this voice is always with me, Screaming in my dreams, This voice in me is secret, One that never shows, But secretly inside of me, The voice echoes from below. Yes...my poem isn't the best...constructive criticism and comments please? |
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Apr 24 2005, 06:47 PM
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i liked it. i can relate so very well to it, and you can tell you put emotion into this. nice job.
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Apr 25 2005, 01:39 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
i like it..good job!
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Apr 25 2005, 04:59 AM
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 College Dude Group: Member Posts: 177 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 106,527 |
such profound words...
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Apr 25 2005, 05:22 PM
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Want fries with that? Group: Member Posts: 692 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,652 |
Thanks all! ^^
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Apr 25 2005, 08:20 PM
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 that heaven is overrated Group: Member Posts: 5,096 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 53,124 |
I like it a lot. It has a meaning that many people can relate to. I do too, sometimes.
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Apr 25 2005, 08:46 PM
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 XOTY*06 :D Group: Member Posts: 2,635 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 6,747 |
i can very well relate! awesome poem! :]
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Apr 25 2005, 10:55 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 242 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,283 |
i liked it
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