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| *islandgirl4eva* |
 Apr 21 2005, 06:57 AM
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I'm trapped in this dark and fathomless chasm
There's no way I can get out Little bits of me are gradually rotting away into the nothingness Desperately I try to snatch them back But they are just barely out of my reach I'm left a husk of myself Gasping for air when there is none The gravity of solitude weighs heavily upon my chest I'll wait quietly for the moment when I can breathe again For the moment when I can see I'm not such a lonely me Captured in a convo with Steph. Thanks for hearing me out and comforting me. I'm usually the one who tries to nurture my friends...it feels good to be nurtured sometimes too. ILU! |
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Apr 21 2005, 09:52 AM
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 .bubblicious inspirations. @ www.bubbliciousoul.com  Group: Member Posts: 466 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,228 |
awww... v. nice words.
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Apr 23 2005, 06:08 PM
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 dripping destruction Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929 |
nice. rythym needs a bit of work tho, (syllable pattern)
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Apr 23 2005, 09:32 PM
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^^ I wasn't aiming for a pattern or rhythm. It was just a random spouting of words, but I know what you mean. Thanks for the honesty.
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| *stephinika* |
Apr 24 2005, 01:46 AM
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aww naomi! i love you too!
 i'm glad i can help even though i'm not doing much. hope you feel better and remember i'm always here to talk to! you rock my socks. 
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Apr 24 2005, 12:28 PM
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Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 3,551 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 102,857 |
I like it very strong words
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