Untitled, --My first poem |
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 Apr 15 2005, 06:11 PM
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 ticktock.  Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235  |
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| *mzkandi* |
Apr 15 2005, 06:40 PM
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Really good first poem, keep it up!
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| *Kathleen* |
Apr 15 2005, 07:21 PM
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Holy shiznit. My first poem was a pile of pooh! That's awesome. Keep it up - you'll only get better.
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Apr 15 2005, 09:21 PM
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 My name's Katt. Nice to meet you! Group: Member Posts: 3,826 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 93,674 |
I like it. The rhythm's really good (unlike some other poems I've read). It flows really well and it has a lot of voice. Nice job! Especially for a first poem, I'm really impressed.
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Apr 15 2005, 10:00 PM
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This was a wonderful first poem. I could feel the uncertainty contradicting the confidence in it. Great job. Write more!
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Apr 15 2005, 10:30 PM
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ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
Thanks! =)
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| *xcaitlinx* |
Apr 15 2005, 10:55 PM
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wow when i read that poem, it really spoke to me. I really like your use of words and the short questions repeated throughout it. good work!
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