Summer Love, ..fading to fall |
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 Apr 14 2005, 08:52 PM
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 pull my finger..  Group: Member Posts: 71 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 116,414  |
swings array in the fall of leaves
walking alone on the beach and grieve as summer love walks away as the sun falls back and no more heat today leaving the sand on the beach and tan on our skin turning away to a brown day and twigs are thin watching them fall as tears stream down knowing that next year is a summer smile and not a fall frown      
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Apr 14 2005, 10:03 PM
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 Change Gon Come Group: Member Posts: 2,286 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,822 |
forreal though, good rhythm. you could be a pretty good rapper if you work at it.
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Apr 16 2005, 08:19 PM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow..its good..i can imagine it..
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| *mzkandi* |
Apr 17 2005, 07:49 AM
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I liked this. It flowed really well.
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| *stephinika* |
Apr 18 2005, 12:28 AM
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^^
i agree. lovely word choices too, painted a picture in my mind. nicely done. |
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