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Temptations of the Flesh, Song by me...
OMENsean
post Apr 4 2005, 04:21 PM
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The feel of steel, slicing through your flesh,
Is intriguing to many kinds.
The feel of blood dripping off your body,
Runs rampid through your mind.

As time goes by, the razor dulls,
The cuts begin to fade.
Nobody questions, nobody wonders,
They all know how they're made.

(Chorus)
The razor slipping through the skin,
Always makes for the sweatest of sin.
Blood flowing in streams, dripping to the floor,
Now open the floodgates, I WANT MORE!

The cuts on your arms, scratches on your legs,
You don't even know your place.
You never know what you're gonna' do,
You've started your fall from Grace.

(Chorus x2)

Comments would be great. Thanks ya'll.
 
inthemudhole
post Apr 4 2005, 07:26 PM
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Pretty good, pretty good.
I like it.
 
smthngcrprategrl...
post Apr 4 2005, 08:29 PM
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that's good.
 
*stephinika*
post Apr 5 2005, 06:41 PM
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very descriptive and well put together. nice job. thumbsup.gif
 
OMENsean
post Apr 6 2005, 12:58 PM
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Thanks guys. I'm glad ya'll like it. I'll be posting more of my stuff soon. Rock on.
 
wounded
post Apr 6 2005, 06:53 PM
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I like this. Although I despise cutting (why don't some scars fade?), this capture the... yeah, perfectly. :) Keep the good job up. :)
 

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