the painter, my second poem |
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 Mar 24 2005, 01:50 PM
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yea i wrote this last night at like midnight
tell me what you think.... The Painter Each visit to the mirror Is a horrifying lie Being born That I am forced To witness everyday I have become an expert At painting Every mask Every lie Orchestrating the strokes So perfectly That no one can see The empty shell That I have become I have turned Into the person That I never wanted to be A life full of Shattered images And broken lies That were never real |
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Mar 25 2005, 12:35 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
phew, nice :) Very deep. I liked how you called it the painter...it was good, me likey :)
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Mar 25 2005, 01:21 PM
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to hell with you Group: Member Posts: 2,547 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,506 |
wow. a very imaginative and creative idea. it should be made into a song.
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Mar 28 2005, 10:29 AM
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... Group: Member Posts: 818 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 32,366 |
QUOTE(KissMe2408 @ Mar 24 2005, 11:35 PM) phew, nice :) Very deep. I liked how you called it the painter...it was good, me likey :)  thanks so much. |
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Mar 28 2005, 11:12 AM
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It's not me whos the problem... Group: Member Posts: 50 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 110,422 |
I like ur title, the concept in, I can relate to in the poem. Love to see more of your work.
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Mar 28 2005, 07:05 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
i like the concept of it and the poem is brilliant
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Mar 31 2005, 07:32 PM
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great idea and written well. strong words. keep up the good work.
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