You Said You Loved Me, a short song/poem |
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 Mar 22 2005, 04:55 PM
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You Said You Loved Me
My world was a mess Then everything I was turned inside out You took my heart, gave me your trust Then you said you loved me You had me upside down twisted right side in Then... My trust, torn all to hell bits and pieces Heh, who needs it? You said you loved me You said you loved me I took your heart, gave you all my trust Then baby you said you loved me What was I supposed to say? I'm sorry... What more could I do? I said I loved you.... I took your heart With your best friend twice last year txt©2005 BeyezB |
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Mar 22 2005, 06:01 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
that's good. when you said "heh who needs this?" you probably could have done without the heh, it doesn't really fit but it's my opinion and your poem so whatever you want. it is good though
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Mar 22 2005, 09:09 PM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
Its nice. I like it.
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Mar 23 2005, 04:09 PM
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 Word. Group: Member Posts: 3,004 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 34,673 |
the best friend thing was pretty.. wow. haha.
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Mar 23 2005, 06:46 PM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow..that was good..good job..
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Mar 25 2005, 12:37 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
lol wow was really good, i totally wasn't expecting the best friend thing part at the end. but great job :)
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Mar 25 2005, 03:20 PM
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That was realli good!!!...I loved how you put down real emotions even w/ the heh...thats how you felt thats how it should be writtened down if you felt it...
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Apr 10 2005, 05:38 PM
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 ticktock. Group: Member Posts: 1,138 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 118,235 |
Great. Sounds alot like a song with the repitition
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