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 Mar 16 2005, 05:38 PM
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 Lemme c ya 1, 2, Step! ;]  Group: Member Posts: 84 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 113,865  |
Gah...I felt so horribly bad yesterday. This is just a poem i UNKNOWINGLY wrote, which expressed the stupid feelings i was having. :\
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ RED TEARS I've been pushed down into the darkness For I bring so much misfortunes to all the living people around me, Not one can I give them the happiness they wanted, But what they get from me are these worst unfortunate moments of their lives. I've been crying red tears since the day I felt so horribly broken, I've been stabbed so painfully behind my back and I just let myself bleed to unconsciousness, My heart's been grabbed so tightly which makes it so much harder for me to breath, As Im trying to live longer, I prayed to see the light to freedom once again. LOVE to admit that I am the fault of all the things that happened to you, Even if I don't deserve to be blame for it And I would jump down the heavens to Recover, to get myself back again. I'm still reaching for the star To grant me my one and only wish, My wish to find the light that will bright up the darkness that covers me from reality, But I know for sure that it will never happen For I am destined to cry red tears Forever and for eternity. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Its not that gud of a poem. Its just like...my 3rd time writing one in my whole entire life. :\ Rate or comment it if u want. |
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| *stephinika* |
Mar 16 2005, 05:46 PM
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not bad. very emotional and heartfelt. hope you feel better, and keep up the good work!
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| *Programmer* |
Mar 16 2005, 05:50 PM
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yeah i gotta say that's very deep...
word of advice...."brush ya shoulders off"...you'll feel alot better... |
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Mar 16 2005, 10:48 PM
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Lemme c ya 1, 2, Step! ;] Group: Member Posts: 84 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 113,865 |
thank you for the comments. :] And yah, im starting to feel a lil bit better now.
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Mar 16 2005, 10:58 PM
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 Live Your Own Party Group: Member Posts: 1,261 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,489 |
I actually think that's really good. It shows a lot of emotion and I like how it's original. It's not in a standard poem format. Good job.
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Mar 16 2005, 11:00 PM
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Tu es laid. Group: Official Member Posts: 3,913 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 106,675 |
*tear* lol wow its very good.. its something i would read when someone passed away or when im really really depressed.. keep up the good work witht he writing
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Mar 17 2005, 04:40 PM
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aww~ hope u feel better~
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Mar 17 2005, 11:41 PM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
that was really deep and emotional. I hope you got some feelings out when you were writing that.
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Mar 18 2005, 05:06 AM
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 `non;chalance Group: Member Posts: 700 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 95,113 |
writing is wonderful, isnt it? i'm glad that you feel better now. sometimes the best times to writeis when you are feeling down because its like, letting all of your emotions out. this poem was written well. i liked the way you expressed yourself :) very good, sweetie^^ keep up the great work
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