A Death, Not Mine Alone, Poem Options

[Sa-Chan]

A Death, Not Mine Alone
By: Savannah Harrison


The phone's ringing such bitter tones,
But I can't answer it,
Because it's to far out of reach,
And you'll hang up at last,
Thinking no one was home...
So maybe, no one ever was.
I'm drowning in tidal waves of sorrow,
In tears that aren't my own,
Perhaps this tragedy was yours,
Perhaps it built up inside you for to long,
And I'm sorry I didn't ever ask you,
Why you never once cried when I went away.
I can't say I'm sorry,
You and I both know that it's to late,
We avoided confrontation,
And our seperate declarations,
Never once sparked realization,
Regretfully still, an apology has yet to grace my lips.
I know that you're upset,
I know that when you sleep you cry,
But have you taken a moment to ask yourself yet...
How your words might have wounded me,
How I might be dying,
Or in this case drowning in our, not just my, grief.
I'm laying in the bath tub,
What a way to forget you,
With the water far above my mouth...my nose...
With the water to far above to ever breathe again,
My clothes are on, and the water's dirty,
From the filth that my day has brought upon me.
This will never end,
I'm sorry that I hurt you,
But you hurt me too,
And the phone will go on forever,
And I'll die with your final ring,
Or else...the operator will give you my last goodbye.

[Sa-Chan]

I was wondering...would anyone like to see a sequel to this poem, maybe from the guy's point of view? Because this is meant to be from the girl's point of view. Thinking back on their relationship, as she drowns herself, and faintly hears the phone call that never came when she needed it going on and on from the next room.

So, I thought I could do what the guy's thinking as he calls her.

[*stephinika*]

i loved it. great perspective and well written. great job.

[CRAZEDindian40]

I think it's an awesome poem, you definitely have a gift.

[Pulchritude]

its awesome but then you didnt write it.. i would be more amazed if it was original but thx for postin it up

[Sa-Chan]

Eh...but...I did write it. Maybe I should start putting by me...

[xTINAA]

It's really good. I think that you should add the other perspective. I'm interested in reading it.

[loljuliana]

Put a sequel. I would love to read it =)

[inthemudhole]

I was wondering...would anyone like to see a sequel to this poem, maybe from the guy's point of view? Because this is meant to be from the girl's point of view. Thinking back on their relationship, as she drowns herself, and faintly hears the phone call that never came when she needed it going on and on from the next room.

So, I thought I could do what the guy's thinking as he calls her.

Yes, I'd love to read that.

This one was wonderful.
I love the words you chose. Very descriptive, very smart.
Lovely job.