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post Feb 27 2005, 02:43 PM
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I'm from north jersey
and i aint ashamed of that
to be exact your the first one
who opened up a fortune cookie that ur a losa
nobody can stop me
until they cop me
jump outta yo seat and drop da damn beat man
wheres my meat dawg im about to bust yo head wide open
this is the best moment
im the next eminem
matta fact, your da next r.kelly
dont make me spit in your mouth
ill take u down from west to south
yeah im korean and i got no problem wit it
you gotta problem well dont get mad cuz they can rap too
if you think you can beat me your just a plain ol foo
who is jason kang?
well im about to make history man
make one comment about rice or taek won doe
ill get my crew to blow your ass
man stop rappin u smell like air gas
u rap like a retarded jew
and i bet u already knew

-Jason aka Kangsta
 
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post Feb 27 2005, 10:46 PM
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o_O; No offense to asians, I'm asian. I take Tae-Kwon-Do and I eat rice, but that kinda sucked. Rap isn't just this trashy talk that rhymes. Rapping is an art and your "rap" doesn't even have any rhythm or anything.

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wheres my meat dawg im about to bust yo head wide open


What poetic value does that have? What the heck does it mean? Why do you want meat? And why are you trying to bust someone's head open?

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make one comment about rice or taek won doe


Wasn't that already used by some other asian rapper? That said something like, "Make one comment about rice or karate, LAPD will be in Chinatown looking for your body, etc".

Um, sorry for my brutal honesty, it's just a habit. There's much more I would critique on but I think I'd best be shutting my mouth. I think you're off to a good start and I'll give you your props for your interest. I'm not like totally into rap (but I am a poet) so maybe my taste is just different.

Clever with the Kangsta combination or your last name and stuff.. _smile.gif

Good luck. biggrin.gif
 
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post Mar 1 2005, 11:46 PM
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I would just like to make a statement here....

1. Most good rappers and poets go through rough times and take a beating before they make it to the top. But do you want to know why they make it to the top? Because they write about what's real. Not about how you're threatening someone for no reason.
2. When you threaten someone, don't threaten them with your "crew". Don't be a P**sy. If you're going to do damage, do it yourself and don't make other poeple take the hit. Not saying that they shouldn't have your back; just saying that they shouldn't be the ones starting the fight.
3. Like I said before, most good rappers go through hard times. I don't think too many people from north Jersey go through too many rough times. I've been up there more than once. It's all suburban and farmyish. Plus, I've seen it bad. I live in the ghetto of Philadelphia. People who live in n. Jersey don't see what you see in the ghetto so they don't have the soul that you have when you're from the ghetto.
4.STOP TRYING TO ACT BLACK!!! I hate it when people do that! omg... Can't you just get your own style instead of making a god damn fool out of yourself? Learn to speak PROPERLY!!!! I live in the ghetto and I can speak well. Speak and write in proper english
5. I'm a Jew, thanks. What's so wrong with that? Well, technicly, I'm Atheist, but I was born a Jew.
6. What's wrong with retarded people? You shouldn't be bustin' on someone for that.
7. And like that chick said, hun, you don't have any rhythm. A rap or poem doesn't work without rhythm.


I think you need to learn about poetry before you try to rap because when all you do is threaten people or try to make people look bad when you can't really rap in the first place, you just look bad, babes. Sorry to say it but it didn't seem like you cared about offending people as you wrote that. So I'm just speaking my mind like you did.
 
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post Mar 2 2005, 06:51 PM
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maybe you'll get lucky. the big companies and record labels are looking for empty vessels to lip sync for them. Im not sure they allow people gayer than nsync, but ill look into it for you.
 
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post Mar 2 2005, 11:35 PM
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you flow is so off.
 

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