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 Dec 28 2004, 12:31 AM
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 [I loovash mah Teh Michy]  Group: Member Posts: 105 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,616  |
Rescue me, my love,
saturate my heart, and free me from the cruelties of this world... Oh, how I wish to see those captivating eyes again. How I long to kiss those sweet, tender lips... Run away with me to paradise, the place we call heaven, and we can love again... breathe again... live again... Silent esctasy will overcome us as we become one... Beautiful angel, don't ever leave, stay with me, forever and always... Take me away to paradise, we'll disappear and become nothing but an enigma. Sorta cheesy, but whatevs. |
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Dec 28 2004, 01:08 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
good concept, delivery left me wanting.
from 1-10 i give it a 2 use some poetic techniques like aliteration, rhyme scheme, and assonance. |
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Dec 28 2004, 10:08 AM
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omy i LOVE it,i felt had goose pimples, just reading it alone,i give it an amaziling f**king 10/10
 
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