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 Dec 7 2004, 10:13 PM
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Mmm 'nother poem. Enjoy.
The darkness comes forth to embrace the unsuspecting city Her elegance alone strikes shame into the word "pretty" Stars dance ablaze upon her divine masterpiece in the sky Cynthia shines brighter than her twin and lets out a lonely sigh From beneath the façade of decorum, her minions escape With only one desire and purpose, 'tis your soul they wish to take Wreaking havoc amongst the defenseless mortals, they dine They stop and fear nothing, even contriving against their own kind The apparent festering of their skin accurately perceives their nature On this hunt for humans it is their blood they thirst for and savor The moon's luminosity travels from above and hits their pale flesh Alas the more they drink, the more they desire something fresh Infants mourn the loss of their loved ones as they wail in despair The nefarious beings wipe out entire family lines without a care Children attempt to flee from the firm grasp they keep Onward they ravage, for it is more crimson liquid they seek As it holds true for everything else, all good things must come to an end 'Tis a true shame these scoundrels we will never apprehend For, just as the pieces mend in one unfortunate city, Another one falls for us all to weep in dear pity |
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Dec 7 2004, 10:23 PM
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 Dark Lord of McCandless  Group: Member Posts: 2,226 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,761 |
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Dec 7 2004, 11:23 PM
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It's about vampires!
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Dec 7 2004, 11:41 PM
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QUOTE(ComradeRed @ Dec 7 2004, 10:23 PM) ROFL. Haha...well, I thought it was a really good poem. If I was forced to find one flaw, I'd say the line: "Her elegance alone strikes shame into the word 'pretty'" I don't know...the word "pretty" in quotation marks seems sort of awkward to me...but great poem overall! ^-^ |
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Dec 8 2004, 08:21 AM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ Dec 7 2004, 11:23 PM) It's about vampires! I can see that. Hence, the link. |
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Dec 8 2004, 03:35 PM
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QUOTE ROFL. Haha...well, I thought it was a really good poem. If I was forced to find one flaw, I'd say the line: "Her elegance alone strikes shame into the word 'pretty'" I don't know...the word "pretty" in quotation marks seems sort of awkward to me...but great poem overall! ^-^ Mmm but that's what I'm used to doing in English class.  When you single out a word or are pointing it out, directly to its meaning, I believe you put it in quotes. Thank you, though.  QUOTE I can see that. Hence, the link. Yeah, but just because I believe in vampires or like to write about them doesn't make me Satanic. 
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Dec 8 2004, 04:02 PM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ Dec 8 2004, 3:35 PM) Yeah, but just because I believe in vampires or like to write about them doesn't make me Satanic. No, a lot of other factors combined make you Satanic.
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Dec 9 2004, 03:40 PM
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satanism is awesome. not really, though. it's got alot more BS in it than catholosism. that's alot of BS.
oh yea! the poem! i <3 it. moonspell would be proud 
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Dec 9 2004, 09:51 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Interesting...Didn't kno you believed in Vampires..Well it's good..odd..yet good..Vampires..odd topic to write a poem on. Anyways..Keep it up eh??
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