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 Nov 30 2004, 01:22 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
as it rains down upon my soul
i tend to lose everything....im out of control my dreams start to slowly fade away again and again day by day.... would you fight for me right by my side... knowing everything we once knew has died. nothing hurts more than love it self... a powerful feeling that cant compare to nothing else i gave up .. what else is there to do when the most thing you want..doesnt want you.. |
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Dec 15 2004, 02:33 PM
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 i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
aww so you're asking for your lover to help you cause theres this pain squishing and pushing you to the deepest, right? hm ok poem^^
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Dec 16 2004, 08:43 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
Hmm well alwayz writing about love =P keep up the good work =P
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Dec 16 2004, 09:03 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol hey thats what im best at and i dont wanna let that go
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Dec 18 2004, 12:26 PM
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i'm susan Group: Official Member Posts: 13,875 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 5,029 |
that's good that you have that kind of skills. i used to have those skills, but i lost it all T_T
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Dec 18 2004, 07:47 PM
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 my <3 is in Ohio Group: Member Posts: 899 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,599 |
it's good i like it
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Dec 20 2004, 06:46 AM
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 High Voltage!∞ Group: Official Member Posts: 4,728 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 29,157 |
i love it! it's so deep
 geat job
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Dec 20 2004, 11:05 AM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
i like it. very random!
 and i love the rhymes. 
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Dec 21 2004, 03:43 AM
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 Bardic Nation Group: Member Posts: 1,113 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 38,059 |
well did you intend for there to be a double negative?
"The thing you most want" I mean if you look at it it says im sad hold me. when you could've said so much more. from 1-10 i give it a 4 |
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Sep 5 2006, 12:38 PM
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^ I remember you, always criticised me on my poems haha always gave me a 4 =[
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