a few poems i wrote off the top of, my head when i was sad/depressed/mad |
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 Nov 26 2004, 06:48 PM
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I love you <33333  Group: Member Posts: 2,928 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,404  |
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Dec 1 2004, 04:18 PM
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I love you <33333 Group: Member Posts: 2,928 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,404 |
i guess no one has anything to say..... lol
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Dec 2 2004, 12:32 AM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
uhmm..Interesting...In your first poem either you should keep the entire thing rhyming. As for the other 2. They're okay but keep writing. You'll get better over time.
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Dec 2 2004, 11:03 PM
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 define our lives for us. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 11,656 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 43,293 |
i like it.
it seems like you were in the "mood" as you were writing. I do that. i prefer rhyming poems though. i love your poems.. hope you're feeling okay. |
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Dec 2 2004, 11:42 PM
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 Quand j'étais jeune... Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 6,826 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 1,272 |
QUOTE(sunissed14127 @ Nov 26 2004, 6:48 PM) You talk behind my back, but why cant you just say it to my face? Are you scared? is that the case? I'm tired of being talked about, tired of getting called names I'm tired of being the one who always takes the blame So please, can we make all of this change? That one hit the mark with me. Hehe, I can relate to that situation a couple years back. I like the colloquial language. It's very to the point. |
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Dec 4 2004, 06:54 PM
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 This bitch better work! Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 13,681 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 28,095 |
oh, i like how they rhyme. they are really emotional. good writing!
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Dec 7 2004, 06:52 PM
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I love you <33333 Group: Member Posts: 2,928 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,404 |
thank you so much everyone! =)
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