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 Oct 14 2004, 06:03 PM
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a little something... just read it.
The curtains dropped As the lights dimmed And the room fell silent. The world pulsed and moved Fading into darkness The downfall still not over. Images flashed through my mind An infinite, unforgettable synapse. Moments from long ago A neverending cycle of deceit and lies. I rose higher Ascending into the clouds To avoid the nuclear winter. The midnight bell tolling As bombs fell, demolishing my hopes and dreams The awkward silence lingered. Memories of high school Blood red ink spilling out onto the paper Always managing to form that perfect "F" I was a failure And everyone refused to catch me as I fell. There was an image of her smiling Then one of her leaving. Love letters morphing into brutal messages of hate As I disappeared into the abyss. Rioters holding wooden torches Burning with passion, burning with hate Deception ultimately coming to an end. Lying in the hospital bed Helpless and vulnerable With her at my side. Her bloodshot eyes were a clear reminder That the war has just begun. |
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Oct 14 2004, 06:06 PM
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very nice, emo one.
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Oct 14 2004, 08:31 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Ah, the comparison of war and human emotion.
Well done. |
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| *Azarel* |
Aug 9 2005, 03:52 PM
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Wow, Joe. Just.. wow. Typically, I don't like pieces on violence, war, and the like, but this is something - memories and emotions touch the heart. I really like it.
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| *not_your_average* |
Aug 10 2005, 04:50 PM
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QUOTE Lying in the hospital bed Helpless and vulnerable With her at my side. Her bloodshot eyes were a clear reminder That the war has just begun. <3 My favorite verse. This was so deeply moving, Joe. We need more writing from you. |
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| *Azarel* |
Jan 14 2006, 04:32 AM
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Bump. Joe is an awesome writer. I wish he would write more. Show him love.
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