My poem, I haven't thought up a title yet! |
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 Sep 9 2004, 11:46 PM
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 The Unfortunate One  Group: Member Posts: 81 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 44,945  |
Your words, they see through me
Intertwine with all my senses They caress my weary heart Fill me up with joy. All else melts away when you speak Resonating gently in my skin, your words All else doesn't matter, just you. Let me fall into a pit of hope A pit of your voice All around me All innocent. Without your gentle words massaging I am nothing. Without your soft vocal comfort I am not alive. You animate my soul with your breath as you have done so Don't cease to breathe and let the silence assemble. I fear silence without you. I fear not hearing your picturesque whispers in my heart. ........................................................................ I'm not too well when it comes to thinking up titles!!  Tell me what you think. Please be gentle! 
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Sep 11 2004, 01:51 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
I think it's absolutely beautiful... You're a great poet. Very Nice Job... as for the title... I have nothing... I never was too much of a title person myself.
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