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my poem
chellibabe124
post Aug 17 2004, 07:14 PM
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read this poem that i wrote and tell me if it is good or even if it makes sense wink.gif

my heart is missing so much,
some of which i cannot find,
but seeing what is lost,
turns my heart blind..
what goes from a glance in the mirror,
turns into a stare,
looking deep inside this pain,
wondering if its caution or despair..
questioning my feelings in relationships,
why they quickly end,
was my heart ever broken?
or is it taking a lifetime to mend?..

thanks!
 
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post Aug 17 2004, 07:15 PM
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someone move it to writing..

and its good. :]
 
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post Aug 17 2004, 07:16 PM
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its good. _smile.gif moved.
 
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post Aug 17 2004, 07:17 PM
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Nice poem. =-]
 
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post Aug 17 2004, 07:21 PM
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mm gewd poem props lol
 
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post Aug 17 2004, 07:46 PM
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this poem deserves to be published.
 
chellibabe124
post Aug 17 2004, 07:56 PM
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aww you guys make me feel speshul happy.gif
 
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post Aug 18 2004, 02:53 AM
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i agree this poem is realli gud i like it
u shud extend it n make it longer ya kno?
 
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post Aug 21 2004, 02:11 AM
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im making a come back! woohoo
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love ur poem... did u just break up? the poem is like.... sad
 

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