I Can't, Hah! I rhymed! I really rhymed!! |
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 Jul 16 2004, 09:45 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes  Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967  |
I Can't
By: Savannah I can't be your heart, And I can't stand us always being apart. All I can do now is close my eyes, Hoping for the day that I might die. I no longer see your face, It's hidden, as if wrapped away in silver lace. I won't look into the mirror, Because I no longer wish to see my eyes filled with terror. I can't be your life, I'm sorry dear; I'm to busy, I can't put down the knife, Today can't you be mine? Just once; just for a moment; just this one, small time? |
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Jul 18 2004, 02:38 AM
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 Aww! ^___^ Group: Member Posts: 184 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,645 |
OMG IT RHYMED!! LOL..IM A WRITER MYSELF TOO..BUT I CAN NEVER RHYME THE WHOLE POEM!! LOL GOOD JOB..LOVIN THE WHOLE THING!!
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Jul 18 2004, 03:57 AM
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 N.CARTER Group: Member Posts: 1,709 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,742 |
Its damn good, great job!
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Jul 18 2004, 11:19 AM
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Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
Thanks to you both! ^^ I'm glad you both liked it! And foolish heart, I was so proud that I rhymed it all. lol.
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Jul 18 2004, 01:36 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 7,048 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,696 |
nice poem.... really like it
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Jul 18 2004, 02:01 PM
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 ohh gosh no Group: Member Posts: 86 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,892 |
Dayng, Talent! haha it takes me forever to make it all rhyme.
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Jul 19 2004, 05:17 PM
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 ~*NEON*~ Group: Member Posts: 195 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,264 |
lucky butthead rhymer
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Jul 21 2004, 02:43 PM
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Stacy Group: Member Posts: 220 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 4,199 |
Rhymes perfectly! I envy you.
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