"I am Me" Options

[USCavalry]

"I am Me"

I am not defined by career, education, social status, physical appearance, nor my failures.
I am a genuinely good person that has slowly compromised their values.
I am a corrupted person reconnecting their soul to the spirit.
I have become defined by what I've let myself become. But I know who I am.
I have not been myself, truly. Like a lesser parallel form of myself.
I now want only to be me. Everything else will follow.

[USCavalry]

thank you for the compliment. i appreciate your thoughts

[heyo-captain-jac...]

Content is pretty good, but it doesn't flow very well. It's a bit awkward to read.

[USCavalry]

i didnt write this with the intent of making poetry (an entry in a diary of sorts). im happy you liked the content and would like to improve my poetry skills

thanks for the feedback itanium

[Ekay]

From a poetry standpoint, I think that it works. Give or take a word. It's good. How long have you been writing?

[USCavalry]

living and feeling all my life, just got to writing about a year ago. you have some good stuff i enjoy reading your poetry/stories as well

[Ekay]

Thanks, it's been awhile since I've been on here. I still write, I just don't post anymore. I've gotten too lazy to and plus, no one ever really gives feedback here anymore so :/

[USCavalry]

this is not the best forum for artistic forms of expression. i think im gonna try and locate one. ill let you know what i find