Concept Piece Options

[firechild]

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I originally designed it for a poster in school (for protest), and then downsized it to fit on the screen.

It's supposed to be minimalistic and conceptual. Yes I did steal the "Don't Taze me, bro" Idea.

Stock Photo: http://www.sxc.hu/photo/1214436

[jiyong]

It took forever to load. I'd work on the placement of the text.

[firechild]

ok. where would you suggest I put it?

[none345678]

I can't see it

[Maccabee]

Looks to me like you did some parts like a vector but did some parts with that old technique that makes it black and white and only shows some parts. Forgot what it is called. Cheap.

Its ok.
Make it smaller.
ANd work on the fonts used and the text placement.

[brooklyneast05]

what makes you say this is a "concept" piece? just because it has a message to it?


i think it looks bad. i don't get how the background texture fits into the theme. the colors in general could be better. i don't get how that photo specifically ads anything or why you chose it. the effect applied looks bad. she has no visible arms or anything like that. it looks like you just posterized it in photoshop. the font isn't good and the arrangement of the text is confusing and unbalanced. "bro" going down vertical looks bad. there is too much space in between it. fonts aren't built to be typed vertically that way and you can see why, the spacing is awful and needs to always be hand adjusted to fix the spacing.

[markmejia]

From far away, I thought you vectored the girl, and was gonna give you major props for that. But yeah, I can't see anything good about the text placement. You could have at least used a better font or two.

[emberfly]

I agree with JC.

[synatribe]

I agree with JC.

Im sorry but your useless posts in showcase are sort of pissing me off now, but besides that,

the image literally froze my comp for about 2 seconds, but moving beyond that, the concept you are trying to portray is very confusing. I'm guessing someone cut off her arms because she used foul language? The background texture dosent fit well and I suggest adding more colors and using different fonts. It seems like you are using Arial Bold, but if you are going for a grungy dark feel, use grungy dark text. Arial is usually a very clean font, used for clean and very simplistic designs. Also the colors clash a tad bit. try adding some red into the font or something. The black is a bit to conservative and overrated.

Use up more canvas space, but dont go overboard, there is nothing to look at except a girl and some text. Details stand out more that the general concept, which is why details are important (especially to createbloggers). I still havent been able to figure out the message portrayed in this piece. But Im guessing it's a protest to prevent censoring of bad words? It's really important to make the message stand out in a concept piece, no one is going to stand there all there to look at your photo. At most a person will usually look at this piece for about 2 seconds and not mind it afterwards.

Sorry for the long read

[manny-the-dino]

I agree with JC 100%. She definitely needs arms and the font/font placement need some major work.

[synapse]

The quality is reallllllly shitty. The message, is not conceived well by the image, if the text wasn't right there in your face, the image has no purpose. Without the girl the piece still has the message.

I'm sorry if I repeated anything from anyone else, I just didn't want to read everyone else's responses.

[Amaranthus]

I don't care for the way her mouth is censored, because it looks like choppy layering technique.