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Starry Skies, stfu and read........................................... please :)
emberfly
post Apr 29 2008, 09:19 PM
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Starry Skies

The stars are eyes
peering on the earth below.
Watching children fall
to sleep, watching
street lamps illuminate
bustling cities.
When the sun rises,
the eyes grow weary.
Falling asleep, they disappear
not to retun
'til night is near.
The stars are eyes
protecting their sleeping children
protecting them
from the dangers of night.

- emberfly is sexy
 
RomanticHarmonie...
post Apr 29 2008, 09:21 PM
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I like. What rhyme scheme is it?
 
emberfly
post Apr 30 2008, 04:33 PM
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Idk. I simple wrote it.

QUOTE(Steubie33 @ Apr 29 2008, 09:21 PM) *
I like. What rhyme scheme is it?


It was SUPPOSED to be freeverse, but since it rhymes in one place, I don't know what to tell you.
 
superstitious
post May 13 2008, 06:38 PM
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QUOTE(emberfly @ Apr 30 2008, 04:33 PM) *
Idk. I simple wrote it.
It was SUPPOSED to be freeverse, but since it rhymes in one place, I don't know what to tell you.

It's freeverse still. The instance of rhyming is incidental. ;)

Nice use of imagery. =)

"- emberfly is sexy" LOL XD
 

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