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 Jan 6 2008, 09:51 PM
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 <joke> inside </joke>  Group: Official Member Posts: 2,283 Joined: Oct 2006 Member No: 470,590  |
Faint Euphoria
A glistening eye The loss of a tear The growth of a mind Faint Euphoria A sound so divine The stretch of a dream A love to be bind Faint Euphoria A color so pure The birth of a child A sky of azure Faint Euphoria A feeling of glee A day of merry A trickle of gay Faint Euphoria |
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Jan 8 2008, 01:08 AM
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 CheccMate Foo! Group: Member Posts: 839 Joined: Dec 2006 Member No: 487,531 |
Well I think I'd be more ecstatic than faint, but overall it's cool. I can vibe to this at a slam.
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Jan 9 2008, 01:18 AM
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 We're in for one wild night. Group: Member Posts: 402 Joined: Dec 2007 Member No: 603,255 |
It's pretty good, I liked your choice of words. However, the "a love to be bind" part doesn't naturally flow. It should be bound or binded, i'm sure you thought about those words and somewhat realized they don't fit too well though.
Good job overall imo. 
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Jan 10 2008, 06:13 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 4,750 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 10,581 |
That's really good, the words pulled me in and my imagination started flowing.
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