Cheesy Break-up Poem., true story, unfortunately. |
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 Aug 1 2007, 11:11 PM
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Aug 2 2007, 01:05 AM
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 skaters gonna skate. Group: Official Member Posts: 6,861 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 6,336 |
nice. i like.
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Aug 2 2007, 04:50 AM
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 Want fries with that? Group: Member Posts: 692 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,652 |
aww! I love it!
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Aug 2 2007, 07:36 AM
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 Lets value our lives. Group: Official Designer Posts: 235 Joined: Nov 2006 Member No: 478,298 |
You tell me that it’s over, I guess it’s for the best. It only hurts me when Im sober, I never would’ve guessed That I’d miss what we could’ve been and what I’ve never really had. Now all I can do is sit and watch, the Good in life go bad. I miss what you were to me and the way you made me feel But after all that’s been ,said and done, I don’t think it was real. You dropped me in a minute, It didn’t take very long. I think of what you’ve put me through, and know I can move on. I added some punctuation thingies.. QUOTE Good in life go bad I didnt really get this one the first time I read it, so I suggest something to clarify the meaning of good in this. thats really sad :[ |
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Aug 2 2007, 11:56 AM
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 Communication breakdown. Group: Member Posts: 603 Joined: Jul 2007 Member No: 552,691 |
I like it. You keep a nice beat throughout the poem.
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Aug 2 2007, 12:55 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
pretty koo, I use to write stuff like this a lot, I still do lol but not as much. reminds me of my old stuff. good job keep it up
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Aug 18 2007, 08:59 AM
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 roosternamedingo. Group: Member Posts: 1,211 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,926 |
It's not cheesy XD
Nice job. =] |
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Aug 18 2007, 09:40 AM
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 Like i care. ♥ Group: Member Posts: 780 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 124,706 |
That's really nice =) I like it alot^^
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