Experiences, haha my first poetry post Options

[maraya2491]

Hello everyone this is my first submission so tell me what you think.

experiences

Growing up I've always experienced the bad
Always been broke and I never knew my dad
I've always prayed each night praying for better days
Asking the lord to take all the pain away
Wanted to live life without any restraints
Go live each day without prejudice and hate
Go through each night peaceful till the coming of the sun
Neva go through nights with the sounds of shooting guns
I have shed so many blood I have cried so many tears
I have lost so many people that I held dear
I have been betrayed by those that I called friends
I have had those days where I wanted to put it to an end
But its these experiences that make me who I am
If I had to go through it I would do it all again
Because if we only had good think how we would be
We learn from are bad times all those pained memories
So when things happen don't take it in stride
Because its all these experiences that make us better people inside

[xKatt]

Wow that was really good!! I love the concept.

My only critique is to spell "Neva" correctly. I don't know why it just bothered me. And it could flow a lot better; perhaps use more sophisticated diction?

Great job overall though.