like coagulated paint |
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 Jan 28 2007, 11:18 PM
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morning is dripping,
falling into afternoon like coagulated paint. the day no longer fluid, it stumbles farther out of reach. eyes see reflected emptyness search upward in question and open to answers. swimming, sweeping light in the flood of a cool starry night my heaven sighs to say: your love is like a flash light you turn it on and off when you want seeking something earth can not supply and forget about it when you're "alright" |
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Feb 2 2007, 09:44 AM
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 CheccMate Foo! Group: Member Posts: 839 Joined: Dec 2006 Member No: 487,531 |
what does coagulated mean?
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Feb 2 2007, 03:26 PM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
clumpy. think of it like when you're scrambling eggs.
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Feb 14 2007, 05:58 AM
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 Jake - The Unholy Trinity / Premiscuous Poeteer. Group: Member Posts: 1,272 Joined: May 2006 Member No: 411,316 |
It's good.
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Feb 20 2007, 12:10 AM
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 Oh My Goblet of Fire! Group: Member Posts: 222 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 504,421 |
This is my favourite I've read in the forums! It's so meaningful and delicate. "Your love is like a flash light" is my favourite line. I don't have anything to add except to ask if your grammar is meant for impact or is just random?
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Feb 28 2007, 09:09 AM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
What do you mean?
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