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With All My Heart
*Kathleen*
post May 21 2004, 08:13 PM
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With All My Heart

Cut me open and watch me die because of you
I loved you with all my heart and you knew
I'll bleed all over you as fast as an epidemic
I'll do that so much you'll hate living - you'll regret it

Tear me open and watch my heart beat for you
Listen, listen close because every breath is true
Racing through your mind evil and dark
I'll never stop, until I know I've made my mark
Paying for the crime you committed (and will probably do more)
I do them all a favor by making you suffer for
My blood is one with you; I'm in your head
Don't count on me leaving until you are dead

Rip my heart out and leave it for the world to see
I loved you every ounce; it was supposed to be
But since you don't feel the same and betray
You will rot forever i the depths of Hell to decay
No longer attached to something not there,
When it's you I see, it's for you I won't care
Love is a fragile bond that you viciously ended
All because you claim to love another I've befriended
 
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post May 21 2004, 08:16 PM
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ohmy.gif Dang.. I'd seriously hate to be the person that poem's addressed to blink.gif

Extremely powerful and well written, very emotional and dark, I love it laugh.gif
 
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post May 21 2004, 08:35 PM
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Haha...oh the ex-boyfriend I'll always have a grudge over. _smile.gif
 
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post May 21 2004, 08:38 PM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ May 21 2004, 9:35 PM)
Haha...oh the ex-boyfriend I'll always have a grudge over. _smile.gif

Whoo, he's missing some good stuff!

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By the way, I like the poem
It's poignant.

I wish I could write like that... _dry.gif
 
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post May 22 2004, 12:42 PM
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Wow huh.gif ohmy.gif ! Every new poem of yours I read, the more impressed I get! wink.gif cool.gif
 
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post May 25 2004, 09:39 PM
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wow. that's some pretty good stuff. blink.gif good talent ((=
 
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post May 26 2004, 08:55 PM
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Aww thanks, shortie. _smile.gif
 
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post May 28 2004, 01:13 PM
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it sounds like a song...or it could be made into a song.. happy.gif

and it would have all these dark sounds.. shifty.gif

kathleen is sooooooo cool! laugh.gif
 
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post May 28 2004, 07:21 PM
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Actually, I did write it to music...hehe...I didn't think anyone would notice. rolleyes.gif
 
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post May 28 2004, 09:14 PM
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QUOTE(Kathleen @ May 28 2004, 7:21 PM)
Actually, I did write it to music...hehe...I didn't think anyone would notice. rolleyes.gif

hahaha!

you thought you could OUTSMART me..?

silly rabbit.. rolleyes.gif
 
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post May 29 2004, 07:21 PM
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wow that poem seems very strong i feel it!!! love it
 
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post Jun 16 2004, 03:41 PM
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whoa. anger laced with blood and vengeance, and no holding back. talk abt a poem with a blood hazed attached.

nice. i knew u could write... happy.gif
 
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post Jun 17 2004, 01:03 PM
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whoa. anger laced with blood and vengeance, and no holding back. talk abt a poem with a blood hazed attached.

nice. i knew u could write...

hehe.gif Thanks. blush.gif Oh haha I know I can write better than this. I wrote this a few years ago when my vocabulary was quite small.
 
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post Jun 17 2004, 02:10 PM
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wow, thats a really great poem. it would make the person feel all bad... and regretful.. if u gave it to me i would die of shock mad.gif
 
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post Jun 17 2004, 04:07 PM
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Haha I don't think he's the type of person to feel bad after someone gave him a poem like that. Heck, I could probably pin it to his forhead, and he still wouldn't get it. _dry.gif
 
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post Jun 20 2004, 04:26 AM
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Very powerful. I love the last line and the statement it made.
 

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