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| *Blow_Don't_SUCK* |
 May 4 2006, 04:15 PM
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Dear sister dressed like a doll
Her glamour and beauty overwhelming us all Dear sister how pretty to look at Her extravagant ribbons knotted into her silken locks Those precious strands kissed with the sun's blessing A silver lining of elegance lies sewed to her heart Swelling with the desire to dance upon all graciousness Exploding with want to be touched by the soul of jubilation Dear sister, exalted with benign gifts Dear sister, drowning in the beatitude of purity Dear sister, dancing in her bewitching adoration Dear sister, I envy thee I gambled my blood for the chance of forgetting To eradicate all illusions set before me May dear sister die upon my jealousy Dancing in her ballroom homicide A thousand dolls watching her facade While in an inferior darkness I hide Dear sister forgive me Dear sister hear my plee I am guilty of those deeds set for your damnation I am guilty of slaughtering those angels Who embraced you with perfection Their blood now engulfs my being I am devoured by the reaper's commands My soul for the price of my dear sister's doll Dear sister dressed like a doll I beg of thee to save me from this fall |
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May 5 2006, 11:03 AM
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 I love Havasupai  Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
I'd love to read the sequel. I can't decide if it would be a murder, confession or a mental breakdown. As always, I'm enamored by the depth of your insight, ability to interpret your visions into words and knowledge of mechanics and conventions.
As you admire my freedom, I'm blissfully swept away by your prose! |
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
May 15 2006, 01:35 PM
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Yen, this is absolutely beautiful. I can barely form the words to tell you how I feel when I read this. All the feelings you have for your sister, for yourself, they shine in this piece. You have a wonderful gift of imagery and depth. I would love to read more from you, love.
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May 15 2006, 03:08 PM
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 (Allison) Group: Human Posts: 420 Joined: Apr 2006 Member No: 395,668 |
I loved it, it was beautiful...The person before me is exactly right; I would love to read more from you!
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| *Blow_Don't_SUCK* |
May 15 2006, 08:20 PM
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Aw thanks guys!
Ewife 
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