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 Mar 27 2006, 08:10 PM
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victim of myspace.com  Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435  |
This wasn't supposed to happen
I shouldn't feel the way I do about you These days, I scarcely smile But because of you, my smile isn't yet extinct. My heart beats warm whenever I'm around you, And even when I just hear your name I feel dizzy, And I just love that feeling. You say you don't like That other girl anymore So maybe that means... No..probably not. But I just can't help but think That you're in love with me too. I'm such an idealist My fantasies will never become reality. Such a sweet soul you are. I haven't felt this way about anyone else before, Baby, you've got my heart. I just wish I could have yours. |
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| *ranniel* |
Mar 27 2006, 08:16 PM
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whoa, sierra too much poems from you. If i were you'd try to do something minimal, its just a suggestion.
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Mar 27 2006, 08:18 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
^^Well, that's a suggestion about future poems. How about this one??
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Mar 27 2006, 08:26 PM
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I really think this sounds great.
 I don't have any critique/suggestions.
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Mar 27 2006, 08:28 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
aw, thanks.
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Mar 29 2006, 08:38 PM
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 no news is good news... Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 232,063 |
awe, its cute
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Mar 30 2006, 01:19 PM
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I love this poem. It's the perfect description of that silly little thing called love. And its personal which is what I like about it the most
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Mar 31 2006, 08:24 PM
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victim of myspace.com Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435 |
thanks!!! <3
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