QUICK!!!, I need to know what poem to say! |
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 Mar 21 2006, 10:46 PM
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victim of myspace.com  Group: Member Posts: 395 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 386,435  |
Okay, so I wrote two poems, both the same thing but with different words, and I need help picking which one!! HELP!
Option One One window is all I need To look out at the world To see the road I have not yet taken. For my future experiences to be seen To reflect with the way I see myself, And forget what others think of me. Option Two One window is all I need To look out at the world To see the road I have not yet taken. One window is all I need To be the sun. Enlightening those to dark to see The exciting colors of life. ----- I think option 1 flows better, but I think the second stanza of the second option is a little better than the first overall poem. I DON'T KNOW HELP!!!!! |
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Mar 21 2006, 10:52 PM
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Ah! They're both really enlightening and inspiring. So short and simple yet so good; for lack of a better adjective at the moment.
I agree with you on both the poems but I think the first one is better. It also depends what message you want to send..helping others in life(2)..or experiencing life yourself(1). It's up to you! I love both. But if I had to choose (because I'd like to be somewhat helpful) I'd say one! |
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Mar 22 2006, 01:41 PM
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 wut wut in the butt? Group: Human Posts: 2,108 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 227,723 |
^i agree with the phoenix person. they're both real good, but if i had to choose i'd say one. i guess cuz of the flow, i really like it that way. and i didn't notice about the different messages in each one until they pointed it out
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