motherhood/fatherhood, i don't deserve this |
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 Mar 4 2006, 02:51 AM
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 fell in love with a boy  Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965  |
This is just for fun, it's not me.. I was just thinking about the precious gift of life.
Their hands were small their heads were big their feet were tiny and their speech was glib the skin was smooth hair fine and soft nails perfect ovals and kisses more than cost so perfect helpless full of life dependent on me. who'd have thought of me? i shouldn't be the one it wouldn't be a good idea this is too precious to be freely given but it is. |
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Mar 4 2006, 03:33 AM
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 I just "got it like that". Group: Member Posts: 247 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,238 |
I like it. It's simple, but it flows. Very straight-forward. Good job!
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Mar 4 2006, 02:25 PM
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 I love Havasupai Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
QUOTE(RiddleMeWonders @ Mar 4 2006, 2:51 AM)  this is too precious to be freely given but it is. Another wonderful conclusion.... |
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Mar 4 2006, 03:13 PM
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This is really good :) I liked how you don't talk about the usual things in your poems. (like me, ahem) ;)
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Mar 4 2006, 09:02 PM
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fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
QUOTE(shes out @ Mar 4 2006, 4:13 PM) This is really good :) I liked how you don't talk about the usual things in your poems. (like me, ahem) ;) Believe me, I've noticed you. Thanks for the great comments everyone. |
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