just a few of my old poems, care to take a look? Options

[such a tragedy]

Hey guys. I know these poems are kinda typical and not my best but I wanted to know what you thought of them. Any critizism would help. Thanks a lot.





I know what I am going to do.
I'm really sorry
I can't explain
that well to you.
My feelings,
they have come and gone.
Another boy has
come along.
I'm sorry,
I can't help my feelings,
but I've also had it
up to the ceiling
with you not talking to me.
So let me go-
it was bound to happen
eventually.



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One day,
shes gunna burst.
Too many emotions
over satisfied her thirst.
She can't stand the drama
along with the frustration and pain.
So called "Friends"
turn their back when
they mention her name.
Oh, one day,
she's gunna burst.
She probably could have
told you that first.



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Scribble out the words
because they aren't the same.
They've changed,
just like your name.
You're no longer the friend-
just the heartbreaker,
the messy end.
Replay the corny romance
lines in your head.
They have no life now,
they are dead.
So say goodbye
to sweet romance;
to times when you thought
we ever had a chance.

[*Blow_Don't_SUCK*]

Aw that sounds pretty and sad at the same time. It's good just work on putting on more "dramatic" descriptions.