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Dressed To Kill
Bobblehead425
post Dec 14 2005, 03:10 PM
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My desperate heart is far too weak to run for you this long.
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new poem. i wrote it about... two days ago? yeah. It doesnt rlly have a title...



She appeared to be dressed to kill
a heart on the ground
cold and so still
The depression in the numbing air
the scene in freeze frame
drenched in despair

It's like magic
the way the blade sliced
right through your life
right through your skin
right through our love
let the catastrophe begin

Say you prayers
this means goodnight
there's just no coming back
from a heart breaking death
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...lol i always love them until i let other people see them.
 
KissMe2408
post Dec 14 2005, 06:37 PM
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Yawn
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Whoa, nice work!

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right through your life
right through your skin
right through our love

I think this part affected me the most.

You write so beautifully, and so real. Please keep submitting!
 
Midnight Faerie
post Dec 14 2005, 07:29 PM
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i'm such a sucker sometimes.
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I must say, if I may put it so bluntly, this rocks. I love your style of writing. Keep it up! flowers.gif
 
*Statistik*
post Dec 17 2005, 12:35 PM
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nice man nice
 

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