We Speak Not Of Miracles, Poem |
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 Dec 12 2005, 09:01 PM
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 Crying Behind Blind Eyes  Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967  |
Here's something I wrote about three weeks ago...
----------------------- "We Speak Not Of Miracles" You'd take it all back... If only you could, But the shame and the self-disgust, Cannot, Will not be abandoned. And all the pointing, laughing children on misery street, Come by your house to take in your defeat. With your broken heart and it's broken song, Lacking rhythmn and talent, YOU'RE SO FAR GONE... And your happiness is as fleeting as a miracle. |
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Dec 18 2005, 04:57 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
QUOTE With your broken heart and it's broken song, I really like that line right there^ Nice job with this =) Keep on writing! |
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Dec 18 2005, 05:10 AM
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 wut wut in the butt? Group: Human Posts: 2,108 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 227,723 |
damn, i really like this one. good shit :]
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Dec 20 2005, 05:56 PM
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 ...who created this mess...? Group: Member Posts: 451 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 97,244 |
The ending is very nice! You did a good job on this. I like the way it's written.
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Dec 21 2005, 02:58 AM
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Senior Member Group: Duplicate Posts: 459 Joined: Nov 2005 Member No: 308,469 |
QUOTE(Sa-Chan @ Dec 12 2005, 9:01 PM) With your broken heart and it's broken song, Lacking rhythmn and talent  i bless thee with mad props for writing like the way you did here. very clever. |
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Dec 21 2005, 01:59 PM
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QUOTE With your broken heart and it's broken song, My favorite part.  Beautiful. It's the title that definitely dragged me in. Gooood job. 
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Dec 22 2005, 03:17 PM
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 can't touch this Group: Member Posts: 174 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 323,184 |
This is kickass. :D I love how I can picture it.
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Jan 17 2006, 04:35 PM
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Crying Behind Blind Eyes Group: Member Posts: 257 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 7,967 |
I just wanted to say thank you to everyone for the kind words, I've actually decided to enter this poem in my highschool's magazine.
Maybe it'll make it. Also, if you liked this, I'm starting several new poems and a short story soon and I'll be adding them to cB, of course. |
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