The Big Lie, MTV Hollywood etc. |
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 Nov 25 2005, 05:02 PM
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Hello everyone I wrote an article about how the big media machine is lying to us all. Check it out http://freakmag.com/The_Vibe/The_Big_Lie.html All opinions are apreciated.
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Nov 25 2005, 05:13 PM
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yerp! Group: Member Posts: 3,489 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 66,454 |
Your opening sentence was a little hard to follow. I'm not sure what the Big Lie is, since you never actually say it in your article. And your solution to the glamorizations of being a gangster or a slut are sort of obvious.
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Nov 25 2005, 05:13 PM
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 Don't worry guys, size doesn't matter...to lesbians Group: Member Posts: 2,444 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 85,066 |
1.) i think this belongs to Writing
2.) this is more of an opiniated way to convince someone to boycott buying artists' merchandise 3.) it's kinda one-sided 4.) it's too short 5.) it's repetitive 6.) sounds like you're preaching 7.) you need to elaborate on the big lie |
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Nov 25 2005, 05:17 PM
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QUOTE(andromeda_90 @ Nov 25 2005, 5:13 PM) 1.) i think this belongs to Writing ^ Andromeda_90 said most of the things I wanted to say. 2.) this is more of an opiniated way to convince someone to boycott buying artists' merchandise 3.) it's kinda one-sided 4.) it's too short 5.) it's repetitive 6.) sounds like you're preaching 7.) you need to elaborate on the big lie  I agree, it is a bit repeative. Far too short for an article. And the opening needs to be a bit more clear. |
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Nov 25 2005, 05:17 PM
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 Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
QUOTE(andromeda_90 @ Nov 25 2005, 3:13 PM) 1.) i think this belongs to Writing 2.) this is more of an opiniated way to convince someone to boycott buying artists' merchandise 3.) it's kinda one-sided 4.) it's too short 5.) it's repetitive 6.) sounds like you're preaching 7.) you need to elaborate on the big lie I agree. It took me a while to comprehend the sentences too. |
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Nov 25 2005, 05:47 PM
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Moved to Writing
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Nov 25 2005, 10:05 PM
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 dakishimetainoni... Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 4,322 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 75,318 |
the things those celebrities do is for entertainment purposes. that's why they're called entertainers. people buy cds and movies to entertain themselves, not to use as a coaster or throwing object.
hollywood isn't all about glamorizing sex, drugs and rock&roll, have you not heard of the movie north country? |
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Nov 26 2005, 12:41 PM
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 It's anything but cute. Group: Member Posts: 403 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 185,571 |
It didn't hold my interest enough for me to finish it.
To Someone who read the whole thing, Was it any good? |
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Nov 26 2005, 03:22 PM
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 "my girls rock balenciaga and smoke mad marijuana" Group: Member Posts: 2,089 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 70,049 |
i guess its true about the 'air'? but everything else.. emm.... hard to follow?
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Nov 26 2005, 05:22 PM
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Bay Area YadadaDiiiig. Group: Official Member Posts: 4,249 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 103,202 |
QUOTE(oneandonlytammie @ Nov 26 2005, 10:41 AM) It didn't hold my interest enough for me to finish it. To Someone who read the whole thing, Was it any good? Did you jst ignore the posts before you ? Try reading Yens [Andromeda] for an idea. |
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