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 Nov 2 2005, 12:38 AM
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 dripping destruction  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,282 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 21,929  |
trapped; the fear wells inside me
trapped; the fear wells inside me seeking the quickest path to be free from these walls inside me; they are my kindgom which confines all found in my lie trapped; the fear wells inside me carving any way to be free trapped; the fear wells inside me paths, paths, they cut; anguish free flows doors, doors, stalworth companions, they quickly close and refines the death's reply sapped; my strength runs from me trickling through my plea trapped; the fear wells inside me canals of terror carve my soul, see this happiness drain from my lips, love's eternal kiss evades pines of the most anguished cry mapped; my tears fall from me tunneling within thee trapped; the fear wells inside me tracks of blood lead all that flee towards windows which show nothing forwards although signs from past do not die lapped; my sadness fills me quickly locking the key the key the key key no more- forever. trapped; the fear wells inside me © 2005 by me. yea, the forms a little strange, i made it up. i think i kinda like it. |
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Nov 2 2005, 12:43 AM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
It's so rich. Delicious. The form is great. It reminds me almost of a1b1a2b2 b1c1b2c2
but not quite. I haven't yet breeched this level of writing. Great job. |
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