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doubleaxel1951
post Oct 14 2005, 09:31 PM
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It's about how like when your good friends ignore you & it hurts
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I am standing here. Waiting for you. Still waiting. I have been standing here for years. I patiently wait like a begger. Waiting out in the cold, patiently waiting. I feel so cold and a lone. One more knock on the door today. Do you answer?

You give no heed to me. I cry on your shoulder, yet you do not feel anything at all. Your shoulder is as dry as it was; it's like a sponge absorbing all my tears as if it were as dry as it started. I scream in your ear. You give nothing. Not even a twitch. I yell in your face. Yet, you still hear nothing. I am standing right here. Do you not see me?

I am discouraged, as usual. I sulk back into my position of meek knocking. I knock on the door. I've knocked 10,000 times. Maybe another one will work. Yet you give no attention to me. Maybe you're not there. Maybe I'm just knocking in vain. Maybe there is not a soul. Maybe you moved. I was too busy in knocking I did not notice that you have left years ago. Where are you? I try to seek you. Perhaps you're not there at all, perhaps I'm just putting my hope into nothing. Just nothing. Are you nothing?

I look inside. You are no where to be found. I leave and I am with nothing. All these years, all my time and effort, everything. Everything I loved, I gave it all up for you. But you were nothing all these years. Nothing at all. Nothing but something in my head. You weren't there. And now I am with nothing. Why did you leave me?

Maybe something is here, but I gave no heed to it because I spent all my attentnion on you, nothing. I turn around and find out something is there. Something has been waiting for me. Something extraordinary. Just waiting for me to open the door. They have been waiting there for years. I never noticed, since I spent all my time on you. They were to give up all hope, just as I did with you. I opened the door of my warmth and let them in. Why has it taken me so long to realize this?

When you are with nothing and when all else has failed you and you found out I was the only thing you had. I will tell you, I have been waiting for years, but you did not care. You wanted things that made you happy then and there, and I was just not one of them. So when you come back with your apologetic cries. I'm not sure wether to give heed to them? Answer the door? Leave you waiting for years? I am not sure. Only time can tell...
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Please tell me what you think, even if you think it sucks...
 
Tribal J_Rome
post Oct 15 2005, 12:08 AM
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wut wut in the butt?
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damn that's deep, i hella love it though. its wonderful
 
doubleaxel1951
post Oct 15 2005, 02:10 PM
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Hey thanks... that was my first time trying to write haha. & it does hurt when people just ignore you when you're standing right there in front of them
 
c4rL4
post Oct 29 2005, 03:22 AM
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this stuff is awesome.
youre good.
its not a story. more like a poem.
and.. i think you should think about becomin a journalist someday.
im just sayin.
you're good. really g00d.. ^^
 
o0olaalaa
post Oct 29 2005, 12:56 PM
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wow. thats real deep.
 
*swtcherriipie*
post Oct 29 2005, 12:57 PM
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=\ i feel shallow.
 
RiddleMeWonders
post Oct 29 2005, 01:27 PM
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fell in love with a boy
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The concept was good. However, I would try to embellish further. Common word usage, it feels detached. While your message was clear, I didnt feel anything from it. That's the difference between a good writer and a great writer. Keep writing.
 
doubleaxel1951
post Nov 11 2005, 08:00 PM
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Thanks _smile.gif keep on commenting biggrin.gif
 

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