The Cure for Depression |
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The Cure for Depression |
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![]() ich heisse Meli. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 909 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 122,016 ![]() |
We met at the crossroads Of present and past I knew that this meeting Was surely our last You didn’t say a word Just handed it to me Walked off into a promise I never could see I looked at that paper Clean, crisp, and white Began to read it Immobilized with fright Not in what was written—no! Only for the writer I read on in silence My throat growing tighter This couldn’t be the girl I befriended long ago After nearly four years I thought she would grow And she had, yes she had! But into the dark And I’m faced with this letter With the innocence of a shark I know I must say it I don’t know just how In reply to that story I read just now But because of my strong feeling About what this meant I know that my letter Should never be sent It was meant to remain Unfinished forever But this was the straw That would break the lever And I can never go back Once the message is sent I only hope that she Will see what it meant But I know that she won’t She’s living in dreams And I doubt if she even knows What her own story means. |
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Senior Member ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 512 Joined: Mar 2004 Member No: 9,682 ![]() |
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![]() ich heisse Meli. ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 909 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 122,016 ![]() |
thanks
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![]() no news is good news... ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 232,063 ![]() |
Wow.
That was pretty rad. |
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![]() Queen of Random Information ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Group: Member Posts: 825 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 157,057 ![]() |
I really liked the last four lines. Nice, it seemed to flow nicely, the only thing I really didn't think fit was the innocence of a shark line. I got why it was there.. but it just didn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. Otherwise, good job. =)
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