can someone rate my freestyle too? Options

[*nightmare4taki*]

as you can see i have typos becuz i actually freestyle lol

[NiKECHiQ]

i TRIED to rhyme. cut me a piece of slack this is the first time i "freestyled" its pretty dumb but i tried i suck at this.



check it, seatin here listening//
anticipating//
reading those rhymes//
some of them are waste of my time//
being an audience//
thinking thinking wheres their conscience//
for killing each others flows//
just to find out who's the master//
all this bull$hit are just lyrical disasters//
taki vs.jason, taki vs.CRV//
5 pages on this thread just to see whose the baddest emcee//
those talk about michael jackson and child molestation//
its better if they get off the net and have a real life confrontation//
i guess this is my first and last try at rapping//
i dont want anybody capping// -on how i suck at this
hey im only a 15 years old girl who gave it a shot//
shut up and drop it like its hot//
this is where my goodbye is said//
before all this rap sh|t gets in my head//

and cut.

[one_of_a_kind]

Some of it was good but some of it was kinda bad.

[*CrackedRearView*]

Heere is a little sequal/
It is clear to see that we were not created equal/
Let me go ahead and finish you fast/
SInce its apparent you have your foot stuck up your ass/
Im black and your girl do me right/
THen be like damn how your kids so white/
Im cold blooded/
You either hate it or love it/
Im the betterman half pass a veterman how can you blame me/
Lyrically kill ya and have jason give you triple bypass like d**k chaney/
Chaos is what i cause Havoc is what i live/
CRV you dont have no d*ck or balls, Sorry ladies he has nothing to give/
I raise the roth to the atmosphere and bring it back to the surface/
CRV you the type to go to jail and drop the soap on purpose/
Your a little schizo with the pen man/
This guys taking up for michael cuz he use to take trips to neverland/
Its no wonder my flow is to massive/
Im just to much to touch im active your passive/
F*cking with me will leave you with a cracked dome/
Dont take your animosity out on me because your having problems at home/
your the dumass you dont know what quintessence mean. THat why im above your comprehension.

quintessence- the essence of something in its purest form

what i mean was i was have the gift and the curse
now go shoot yourself lol

First off, dipshit, quintessence is a word like that of 'prototype', as in, the purest or best example of something. You said 'quintessence curse', which makes absolutely no sense. I turned it, and called you a quintessence of a fool, which is proper English, you know-nothing, backwoods piece of shit.

Anyway...

Gather round, little kiddies, and I'll tell a little story../
Bout a little punk bitch with a serious lack of glory../
Once upon a time there lived a man we called the mini-pimp../
He was a misinformed, uneducated online e-gimp../
He needed serious help one day and called up Dr. CRV../
And his prescription from this man was just a simple guarantee../
He said, "You'll never be a rapper, you'll never be a star.."/
"You'll never have no fans who give a damn 'bout who you are."/
And so, this mini-pimp walked off a cliff and landed at the base../
And the world lived happily ever after as a seriously better place../
That's the end of this fairy tale, every single word is true../
Not a solitary person in this forum cares 'bout you../
Then you had to go and do it, had to talk about my girl../
So I went and tried yours out, had to give that bitch a whirl../
So I took her to the 'telly and we did a little smoke../
Then I threw her on her belly, gave that ass a little poke../
The look upon her face was one of absolute joy../
What she needed was a man and not a pubeless little boy../
That look was priceless 'cross that face you love so much../
'Cross that face you love to touch../
'Cross that face you thought you trust?/
'Cross that face that's on my nuts../
Fact is, you're gettin' laughed at cause you think you're such a badass../
When it's clear to everyone you're more than likely just a fatass../
Talk about 'spittin' rhyme while you're on the 'net, please../
You must need Kleenex for that spit that's all up on your keyboard keys../
Let's 'snap back to reality'../
'Look! It's e-faggot! Man he's on a cB battle! He's a grown man!'../
You still ain't answered all my questions, still ain't made it very clear../
Still ain't shown why half the time your rhymes are hurtin' so severe../
But you never seem to listen like I'm talkin' to a wall../
But that's okay, I'm still the one that's winnin' in this verbal brawl../
Once again you still suck and you've presumed enough today../
So I'ma put you in time out and take your talking rights away../

[*wind&fire*]

one wonders what your Korean parents think about this Jason...

[*CrackedRearView*]

No, don't worry -- I'm just doing this for fun. I'm actually headed to my first year of college this summer, and I'm not a 'gangster thug'.

Just wanted to show these two idiots that they're not special -- anyone can put together a few rhyming couplets and mix it with bad English.

[NiKECHiQ]

^LOL thats what i tried to do

[*wind&fire*]

no acutally i edited my post cos i wasnt sure any of you knew who it was directed towards... but acutally your style is good, but when you started to rhyme with "oy" it kinda put me off

edit...dammmiiitttt.. you peple post to fast... ^^^^^ is directed to crackedrearview

edit.. stooopid spelling mistakes... but i love the edit button

[Rachel]

justin-you are amazing! you put both those "wannabe gangstas" in their place.

taki-obviously justin or CRV is just messing around, you don't need to take everything so seriously...altho maybe its because he pwned you without even trying.

to jason and taki- both of you need to shut the f**k up, once and for all. YOU BOTH SUCK.

[Angel_Cece]

UM. those freestyles are whack. i've seen 5 year olds freestyle better around my hood

[racoons > you]

heh taki vs. jason

should be better than the freddy version.

i prefer taki. he has wit. but frankly, justin owns he pair of you. read and learrn how to actually rhyme words. i'm glad justins back. i never met him b4, but hes great. classic stuff

[*nightmare4taki*]

Okay yall be witness when i spit this/
Becuz im going to have to beg the lord for forgivness/
Nothing can save now now whose going to protect you/
After I kill you Not even Jesus can ressurect you/
CRV you need to quit c*ckblockin/
Trying to stop my hustle on my c**chie stock options/
CRV never owned me cuz i own him/
This man is more fake then little kim/
Get it right i never said anything about being famous/
You probaly wasn't listining since you have a stick stuck up your a***/
So you need to quit messing with the imperial/
Eat you up whole just like some cereal/
My flows goes more deeper than your grave/
Work the microphone like a white man work a slave/
Please CRV you dont even matter/
This is the flow that will make your heart shatter/
I merely holding back for your 1st grade rap/
This time there really is no coming back/
Im going to be the bigger man and let your start walkin
Just keep talkin and your parents will be in front of your coffin/
In between the sheets with your girlfriend making love/
No repercussion bang your head like a percussion/
Bend your back in just to hear your bones crushin/
Put you into misery and erase your history/
Is it me or is this man just a p*****/
But dont sweat it you read right here played in full/
And everything you spit thus far was nothing but bull/

[*CrackedRearView*]

Okay yall be witness when i spit this/
Becuz im going to have to beg the lord for forgivness/
Nothing can save now now whose going to protect you/
After I kill you Not even Jesus can ressurect you/
CRV you need to quit c*ckblockin/
Trying to stop my hustle on my c**chie stock options/
CRV never owned me cuz  i own him/
This man is more fake then little kim/
Get it right i never said anything about being famous/
You probaly wasn't listining since you have a stick stuck up your a***/
So you need to quit messing with the imperial/
Eat you up whole just like some cereal/
My flows goes more deeper than your grave/
Work the microphone like a white man work a slave/
Please CRV you dont even matter/
This is the flow that will make your heart shatter/
I merely holding back for your 1st grade rap/
This time there really is no coming back/
Im going to be the bigger man and let your start walkin
Just keep talkin and your parents will be in front of your coffin/
In between the sheets with your girlfriend making love/
No repercussion bang your head like a percussion/
Bend your back in just to hear your bones crushin/
Put you into misery and erase your history/
Is it me or is this man just a p*****/
But dont sweat it you read right here played in full/
And everything you spit thus far was nothing but bull/

NEWSFLASH -- THIS JUST IN, the Tool still thinks his 'flow' can win../
Again with the 'spitting', spit dribbles up and down his chin../
Now check out our relationship, you don't wanna spoil it../
You just need to get back to work, back to cleanin' the toilets../
I'm sorry but this rap thing is simply never gonna work../
So putcha' nametag back on, and ring up my gas, clerk../
I'm like the little voice inside your head that tells you the truth../
The little voice that tries stop you f**kin' up in your youth../
So here I am, advice voice, ready to dish you the latest../
S-T-O-P R-A-P-P-I-N-G, your rhymes aren't the greatest../
You been watchin' too much 8 Mile and it's fried up your brain../
Cause all this talk about your flowin' spit's inflicting me pain../
Once again, you struck a cord, Line 20's just wrong../
Parents, and coffins, is that a threat I see in your song?/
But then I clowned you, quintessence? You need to buy you a clue../
Just stop posting...you've made a big dent in my I.Q.../
'Crushin my bones'? Now there's some desperation../
The only thing that you're crushing is your teeny tiny reputation../
Look man, just so we can get rid of all delay../
Just let me kick you in the nuts, and we'll call it a day../

[*nightmare4taki*]

Dumass learn what i mean when i say quintessence/
YOu dont understand rap u dumass adolescence/
Its obvious you cant understand me/
Because your opponent is eating you like candy/
No threats when I let you have it and cause havoc/
Burn you like acid and the stuff I come up with is always a classic/
As you can see my flow is to colossal/
and all Your rhymes are all older than a fossil/
You hit me in crouch, nope You will never do that/
I got a better chance of hooking up with your girl behind your back/
Me pumpin your gas please we know thats your job/
I pray that at night you don’t get robbed/
You slob when are you going to quit/
Your frying your own brain typing bull sh*t/
Its kill me people that his parents don’t know hot to treat em
They always take him in the back room and beat em
Obviously you like my lyrics because you quote and repeat em/
Slavery ended years ago im free so quit talking about freedom/
I really don’t give a damn about a reputation like him/
Its obvious your future isn’t bright but dim/
IM r*ch b*tch I roll craps with stevie wonder/
Thats why I take b*tches like you down under/
Look at me im on a roll/
Now someone get the reaper to come take his soul/
Why you so mad man im having fun/
You haven’t hurt me but for you have been abused so the damage has been done/
What friendship, n*gga you don’t know me/
SO if you got flow you gone have to show me/
But so far you haven’t showed me sh*t/
I started this freestyle and this the thanks I get/
Your flow is just plain at most and most certainly rotton/
Calling me a dumass, then come help me do some of my calculus based physics problems/
Now what else do I have to prove to you/
I’ll be over in just a sec to tutor you/

[cocoalightning27]

^he's 50 times better and 50 times funnier...hahaha

Anyways, your asian....Don't get me wrong or anything but Asians are meant to be smart well mannered people...and you come her rapping thinking like your some kind of "Kangsta" whatever the he!! that is.............dare I say it, your a disgrace to Asians

[william]

personally, i'm still thinking:
crackedrearview > nightmare4taki > jason109825790650.

[*nightmare4taki*]

im not aisan im black

[cocoalightning27]

Talking about jason...not you Taki...

[*nightmare4taki*]

srry man
my bad

[*nightmare4taki*]

NIKECHIQ
hey im only a 15 years old girl who gave it a shot//
shut up and drop it like its hot//

Damn i like that line for some reason. THats the best line on this thread

[*Statistik*]

IM BACK FOO

replying to cracked:

rush through your viegns like blood to your heart
i brush the dust off alll family's an rip them apart/
i hit you with more power than electric comin from thunder
im the reason i take 90 percent of souls to the deep down under/
i can make you feel bad...shit, i can make you feel good
i can spread like wild fire to everybody in the hood/
an once youve had a taste, i know you'll come back for more
cuz the high that you get from me is to good to ignore/
My Only Trust Is Crack,Pop The Toolie,Im Bustin Back/
Copping Cigarettes Is The Only Time You Touchin Packs/
4 More Lines To Drop,Then Again,Im Freestylin For Fun/
Dont Hate Cuz I Got Fans And Your Freestyling For None/
Back At RB,Shits Different,But I've Only Been Gon For Seconds/
Lil Kids In Try-Out Threads,Tryin To Spit,Gettin Rejected/

whos next f**kers

[NiKECHiQ]

you have fans ?

[*nightmare4taki*]

Jason I rush ya , touch ya and let you feel it spiritually /
You nowhere near where I am lyrically/
Come on we all know you’re a pop sanger/ (singer- ghetto terminology)
N*gga Quit crip walking if your not a gang banger/
Kangsta a Gangsta uh tisket a tasket/
Equally beef with me and pick out your style of casket/
I sit here pop locking in my b-boy stance/
Why am I freestyling against a kid that still wets his pance/

[*nightmare4taki*]

Jason
i can make you feel bad...shit, i can make you feel good
i can spread like wild fire to everybody in the hood/

That line just made my day. Sh*t im still laughing and im going to be laughing until tommorow.

[*CrackedRearView*]

Dumass learn what i mean when i say quintessence/
YOu dont understand rap u dumass adolescence/
Its obvious you cant understand me/
Because your opponent is eating you like candy/
No threats when I let you have it and cause havoc/
Burn you like acid and the stuff I come up with is always a classic/
As you can see my flow is to colossal/
and all Your rhymes are all older than a fossil/
You hit me in crouch, nope You will  never do that/
I got a better chance of hooking up with your girl behind your back/
Me pumpin your gas please we know thats your job/
I pray that at night you don’t get robbed/
You slob when are you going to quit/
Your frying your own brain typing bull sh*t/
Its kill me people that his parents don’t know hot to treat em
They always take him in the back room and beat em
Obviously you like my lyrics because you quote and repeat em/
Slavery ended years ago im free so quit talking about freedom/
I really don’t give a damn about a reputation like him/
Its obvious your future isn’t bright but dim/
IM r*ch b*tch I roll craps with stevie wonder/
Thats why I take b*tches like you down under/
Look at me im on a roll/
Now someone get the reaper to come take his soul/
Why you so mad man im having fun/
You haven’t hurt me but for you have been abused so the damage has been done/
What friendship, n*gga you don’t know me/
SO if you got flow you gone have to show me/
But so far you haven’t showed me sh*t/
I started this freestyle and this the thanks I get/  
Your flow is just plain at most and most certainly rotton/
Calling me a dumass, then come help me do some of my calculus based physics problems/
Now what else do I have to prove to you/
I’ll be over in just a sec to tutor you/

Ladies and gentleman, we have ourselves a joker../
With continuous attempts that fall short of mediocre../
Let's use facts now, you said my future ain't bright, but dim../
Truth be told I'm off to Cornell, and that ain't very grim../
You been talkin' outcha ass man, no use of facts../
These people see it, too, you wonder why they turned all their backs?/
Here's a fact: william, March, and Crazy all think I'm better../
Let's go get the Pope and have him write encyclical letters../
To all the leaders of the world just so they know I'm the best../
And get the Pope to say you suck and I'm the one who is blessed../
First off, you 'roll craps' with a blind man../
But your terms are wrong again you must be lyin', man../
Mr. High Roller, you don't 'roll' craps, where I'm from you 'shoot'../
You just keep provin' and provin' to us you're not that astute../
So what's that, you need some help up in your calculus shit?/
That's for people with smarts man, you just ain't fit../
I'm an animal, like Hannibal the cannibal../
Dismantle you...tearin' you limb from limb, dislocate'cha mandible../
My verbal gun puts 8 in your chest like a Kobe jersey../
Reloads and throws 42 in your back like James Worthy../
In the end you will be down; in the end you're on the ground../
In the end I'll be the one that's on cB, profound, renowned../
Go and call an ambulance, it's a CRV-made grammar war../
Get a nurse for Tool and do some CPR to save this whore../
I'ma make this one suitable for you to know..
Who's got the 'flow' when my words hit your cuticle../
And now everyone's gunnin' for me, everyone's tryna' take it../
My spot.. but I'm never gonna stop so ain't nobody gonna make it../
Just one more thing man, just take a nice good look../
In this chess game of rap, you're a pawn and I'm a rook../