Art Critique please, -Nothing rude |
Art Critique please, -Nothing rude |
Jul 9 2009, 10:32 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,938 Joined: Jul 2008 Member No: 667,832 |
So this is the picture so far, I would love some light critique so I can improve (Ex Colouring, drawing, etc)
Thanks. |
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Jul 9 2009, 10:35 PM
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*Shelby-Zu* |
Jul 9 2009, 10:36 PM
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i completely agree, neck looks a bit long.
but as already stated, the rest looks great!! shading maybe? x |
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Jul 9 2009, 10:36 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Designer Posts: 5,880 Joined: Nov 2007 Member No: 593,382 |
I really love these! Nothing I can say! It doesnt look like you are trying to resemble humans, its just a different style! Keep going and show us the finished product!
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Jul 9 2009, 10:37 PM
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(′ ・ω・`) Group: Official Designer Posts: 6,179 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 72,477 |
ooo nice coloring. something about her nose and chin irks me. i think its the position or structure.
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Jul 9 2009, 10:39 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,938 Joined: Jul 2008 Member No: 667,832 |
JCP: Thanks :)
Doughnut: Yeah your right the nose is irking me now, The chin is thankfully easy to fix Thank you love :) |
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Jul 9 2009, 11:07 PM
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Senior Member Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 2,435 Joined: Feb 2007 Member No: 506,205 |
I actually think the long neck looks okay on the left one, it's just the right one that looks a bit abnormal. The thing that bothers me if the position of the mouth. It looks like there is too much face to the right of it.
Other than that, I think it looks fantastic. The coloring especially looks great so far. |
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Jul 9 2009, 11:42 PM
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DDR \\ I'm Dee :) Group: Mentor Posts: 8,662 Joined: Mar 2006 Member No: 384,020 |
I really like the coloring. I don't mind the long necks, but the jaw does look strange.
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Jul 9 2009, 11:44 PM
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Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,154 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 95,404 |
The longer necks look totally fine to me. What's bugging me are the eyes; they look like they're looking in different directions.
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Jul 10 2009, 12:29 AM
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Jul 10 2009, 12:44 AM
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Senior Member Group: Administrator Posts: 8,629 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 498,468 |
I actually think the long neck looks okay on the left one, it's just the right one that looks a bit abnormal. Yeah I agree. The nose on the one on the left is too pointy for my liking but it looks like you were going for a more cartoon feel so it works. What's bugging me are the eyes; they look like they're looking in different directions. Now that I look at them, I see what Joanne means. But honestly Stef, this isn't that bad. It's really good actually. It's just little details you need to clean up. Looks nice :) |
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Jul 10 2009, 01:47 AM
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Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,154 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 95,404 |
Yeah, what Natalia said. The style's really nice, and I love the colouring.
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Jul 10 2009, 10:00 AM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,938 Joined: Jul 2008 Member No: 667,832 |
Oh and yes its more stylism than realism
Thanky you manny :) and Joanne :) Thankfully all the details you guys are telling me are easily fixed and when I posted this I definetly noticed the eyes too Hopefully I can complete this tonite and ill post the finishing look And im glad you guys like the colouring, I was trying a new technique and i was afraid this would look splitchy |
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Jul 10 2009, 11:14 AM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,938 Joined: Jul 2008 Member No: 667,832 |
Thank you mike ^__^
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Jul 10 2009, 12:27 PM
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(Allison) Group: Human Posts: 420 Joined: Apr 2006 Member No: 395,668 |
I think the mouth is too low on the face, and it extends too far to the left. But other than that, it's great :D
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Jul 16 2009, 01:21 AM
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;) Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,573 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 99,124 |
I personally like the drawing, but the only thing that really bothers me is the chin
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Jul 19 2009, 11:35 AM
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Ok So i Went back and fixed it up
HOPEFULLY you guys can see the difference, The red arrows are the areas fixed Now I did the best i could with the eyes, the was the most tricky area to re-fix and the right neck just ignore because clothing is going to covour that area Before After Able to see a difference? If there is anything else you think is still iffy tell me But overall thanks so much for the Critique so-far It looks A LOT better <3 |
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Jul 19 2009, 12:27 PM
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Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 1,036 Joined: May 2009 Member No: 727,246 |
i like the changes. the overall drawing flows much better :D
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Jul 19 2009, 12:28 PM
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Live long and prosper. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,142 Joined: Apr 2007 Member No: 514,926 |
The chin, nose, and the left cheek (in our perspective) they have pink then white levels.. looks like pimples.
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Jul 19 2009, 12:42 PM
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sweet Im glad you guys like it better
The chin, nose, and the left cheek (in our perspective) they have pink then white levels.. looks like pimples. ok, Got most fixed, Im not really going to realism so I kindof made the skin like that on purpose. Yeah, Im fixing that up right now, and Yeah Im not going for realism, so The hand is purposly like that (though I do agree it could be smaller) But im really glad you like it Oh, and I dont know if you knew this or not, but they are actually two boys :3 (not suppose to be gay though) Hope that doesm't Irk anyone >__< |
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Jul 19 2009, 06:01 PM
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Senior Member Group: Administrator Posts: 8,629 Joined: Jan 2007 Member No: 498,468 |
Wow it looks a lot better. Nice job, Stef!
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Jul 19 2009, 09:54 PM
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Jul 20 2009, 03:20 AM
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Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 7,154 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 95,404 |
.... they're guys?
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Jul 20 2009, 10:30 PM
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Jul 30 2009, 01:32 PM
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.beautiful . dreamer . Group: Member Posts: 87 Joined: Dec 2005 Member No: 333,086 |
Ohh, lovely to see an anime/manga artist here. :3
I think you need to work on your anatomy a bit more. What bothered me most was the chin and how flat the face looked. :< The necks are still a bit too long in the sense that it looks like they're missing that muscle between the neck and the shoulders; the neck should be less straight down on both characters. (sorry I don't know anatomy when it comes to terminology). But if it's your style, there's no to need to fix if you don't want to. x] Otherwise, I see great potential. I love the pastel-type coloring style you have and the artstyle overall. It has a soft appealing to it and the people have nice slender features. Wonderful job! |
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