trapped, i got bored one day |
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 Sep 11 2005, 02:17 PM
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 no news is good news...  Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 232,063  |
the sun is shining through the window
but i cannot see it for my life is full of hate and dissappointment the house feels like a jail from which i cannot escape i try too, constantly but i cannot escape, i must not but i cant help rebelling against the rules once in a while no one can but why is it that we must get punished for it? why is it that we must suffer when we try to do our best? why? so many questions asked, but no one's answering, for they ask me more than i ask them. they interrogate me try to change me as if i am a criminal but i'm a human being. we all are. im sorry i can't be perfect no one can. everyone has their flaws some, more than others the light fades, the hate overcomes me the darkness prevails never leaving I am trapped. |
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Sep 11 2005, 02:29 PM
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 i'm such a sucker sometimes. Group: Member Posts: 441 Joined: Jun 2005 Member No: 151,732 |
Wow.
 I can relate to that so incredibley well, it's as if you drilled a hole inside the hell that is my mind, and took out words I've longed to form. That was brilliant. Great job.
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Sep 11 2005, 02:36 PM
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no news is good news... Group: Member Posts: 123 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 232,063 |
Wow, thanks
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Sep 16 2005, 06:19 PM
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I really really liked it!!
"they interrogate me try to change me as if i am a criminal but i'm a human being. we all are." those are great lines!! LOVED IT |
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Sep 26 2005, 06:59 PM
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 MY LIFE IS MY LIFE !!!! Group: Member Posts: 262 Joined: Sep 2005 Member No: 242,521 |
 nice work it says how I feel sometimes.....yes very nice work...very good words
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Oct 4 2005, 04:33 PM
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SOS Brigade!! Group: Member Posts: 2,573 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,775 |
Poem was nicely written. Seems like it can have more of a darkness onto it but I like the whole thing of the feeling of being trapped.
nice job ! |
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Oct 4 2005, 08:15 PM
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 I love Havasupai Group: Member Posts: 1,040 Joined: Jul 2005 Member No: 163,878 |
QUOTE(xstab.my.heartx @ Sep 11 2005, 3:17 PM) the sun is shining through the window but i cannot see it  Great introduction. It really sets the tone of your writing. I hope you are able to find inspiration from sources other than boredom. It would be sad to see this writing become a deeper reflection of your life. Sunshine can be more deeply appreciated after a few days of rain. |
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