Inspiration has hit!, Finallllly. |
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 Apr 20 2005, 10:19 AM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale.  Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045  |
Well I was on the plane to Chicago on Friday, just sitting there and listening to The Used when all of a sudden, I was inspired. To my despair my mom did not have any paper. So what did I write this beauty on? A NAPKIN!!! I felt soo....artsy
 anyways enjoy. There isn't really a structure. I wouldn't really call it a poem. It just, well, came to me. You can comment, critique, cry, laugh...whatever! I just felt like sharing  I still remember the first day we met. I was the new girl, you were the class clown. Almost immediately I knew we were going to be friends. What I did not expect, was love. True love. You just stole my heart with your big blue eyes and sweet smile. Our first date was with your parents. I came late, you had already paid. I, of course, forgot my key and had to go home with you. When my parents finally came an hour later, they hit it off with yours. I was there for another three hours. The next day, I was back at your house. We were on your bed, it was 11:11. You told me to make a wish. A few minutes later, you turned to me and suprised me with a kiss. It was our first and one of many. Then a few minutes later, your dad walks in! God that was funny. We may be young but I know our love is real. You are my rock and you are my soul. You have this effect on me, I cannot really put it into words. You just understand me, you get me and accept me for who I am. I love you for that. You truly are amazing. I cannot stand it when we are apart. To quote The Used: "Every second I'm without you I'm a mess" I really am. All that I ask is please, please don't break my heart. |
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Apr 20 2005, 12:01 PM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
wow rachel, that was beautiful. you wrote it on a napkin? that's awesome.
what does this line mean-- QUOTE When my parents finally came an hour later, they it off with yours.
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Apr 20 2005, 12:04 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
whoooops, they HIT it off =) hehe I'll go change that right now
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| *mzkandi* |
Apr 20 2005, 12:44 PM
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QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ Apr 20 2005, 11:19 AM) I cannot stand it when we are apart. To quote The Used: "Every second I'm without you I'm a mess" I really am.  I so know the feeling...love it is a great thing, especially when you have someone to share it with 
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Apr 20 2005, 02:00 PM
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 Holla if ya hate me Group: Member Posts: 2,386 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 80,819 |
Pretty
I like it, you too have the ability to write your own book xD |
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Apr 20 2005, 08:08 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
^haha thanks =)
I want to be a journalist/writer in my days to come so I figure I better write whenever I can. |
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Apr 20 2005, 08:13 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Official Member Posts: 4,882 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 47,064 |
aww Rachel, that's so cute. Just curious, are you going to show him that? I can tell you really have deep feelings for him =]
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Apr 20 2005, 08:52 PM
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 *scribble scribble* Group: Member Posts: 1,314 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 119,610 |
thats really nice. you should show it to him on his birthday or some special ocaasion.
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Apr 20 2005, 09:05 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
Hehe, I am not sure...I don't think he knows that I write things haha. It might like...freak him out! Oh well, he is the one who asked me to marry him. I might include it with his presents I bought him while I was gone.
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Apr 20 2005, 09:09 PM
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QUOTE(xxcrazyjewxx @ Apr 20 2005, 10:05 PM) Hehe, I am not sure...I don't think he knows that I write things haha. It might like...freak him out! Oh well, he is the one who asked me to marry him. I might include it with his presents I bought him while I was gone. wow marry!! sounds serious. and what did you say!! sorry if its personal its just that one of my friend's now fiance proposed to her three days ago and i witnessed it |
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Apr 20 2005, 09:22 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
^Haha, well I said yes but that we were too young. I mean, he didn't like propose or anything but it was cute. We talked and decided that if we are still together in our twenties, only 3 years away, that we would want to get married. For right now, I am happy enough with love =)
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Apr 20 2005, 10:29 PM
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It's so full of emotion and love that you bear for this person. I can feel it. It's so sweet Rachel. Reading this, I really hope that you are happy with this person forever. Good job.
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Apr 20 2005, 11:52 PM
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^^
i completely agree with naomi. that was so beautiful. it was so heartfelt, i loved it.
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Apr 21 2005, 12:41 AM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
Very lovely. I like it a lot.
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Apr 21 2005, 02:15 AM
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Great job Rachel. I love it. I like how you said things so plainly but you could still feel the strong emotions there. Awesome
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Apr 21 2005, 03:24 AM
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 .bubblicious inspirations. @ www.bubbliciousoul.com Group: Member Posts: 466 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 112,228 |
so touched...
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Apr 21 2005, 12:18 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
Thanks guys =). It was just like a sudden burst of creativity/love. *shivers* haha I feel like such a nerd. Oh well, I am nerd in love
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Apr 21 2005, 05:06 PM
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ahhh~ :D that was such a sweet poem.
That sounds so romantic Its such a cute poem!
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Apr 21 2005, 05:21 PM
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 NO. I'm not 13. or 14. or 15. or 16. Group: Member Posts: 4,616 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 30,577 |
That's a gorgeous piece of writing =]
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Apr 21 2005, 08:04 PM
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That was amazing.
You're such a good writer, Rachel. That was pretty sweet too. I hope he doesn't break your heart.
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Apr 23 2005, 10:52 AM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
^Me too. If he breaks my heart, I have a bunch of girls ready to kick his ass for me haha.
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Apr 27 2005, 04:38 PM
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 SCHGEB!SCHGEB! Group: Member Posts: 1,786 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 66,217 |
Thats a beautiful poem.
"You told me to make a wish. A few minutes later, you turned to me and suprised me with a kiss" that is such a cute line. amazing job. it seems like u deeply care for him, and love is a beautiful thing.
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Apr 27 2005, 07:11 PM
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i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
^Thank you much <3
Love is a super thing haha. |
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Apr 28 2005, 11:59 PM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
my goodness that was lovely =) It was simple, yet it really painted a picture in your mind and there was a sense of reality and sweetness perfectly mixed together. Great job on that one =) i hope inspiration hits again.
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Apr 29 2005, 02:42 AM
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 I'll never be who I was again.. Group: Member Posts: 2,886 Joined: Jan 2005 Member No: 77,981 |
wow..that was good...i really like it..
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