Summer Dreams, my first poem submitted =] |
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| *SimplePlan_Luvr* |
 Jun 24 2005, 09:34 PM
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Summer Dreams
You feel the last days of Summer that linger on In the cool night breeze As the days of summer fade into the pass Walking into the shadows of a lonely starless night Alone with unspoken thoughts of the eternal pass Loneliness crumbles under your steps as you Stretch forward to heaven’s light But only to find nothing You feel cheated from existence Emptiness haunts within you As you disappeared from my summer dream By//Liz [did this in skool... I was bored  ]
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Jun 24 2005, 09:37 PM
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 The Texan  Group: Member Posts: 430 Joined: May 2005 Member No: 136,431 |
Not bad, not bad. Something about it just really tugs at me.
I give it 2 thumbs, 1 toe, a shoulder, and an ear up ^_^ |
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Jun 24 2005, 09:55 PM
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 What a hypocrite. Group: Member Posts: 2,754 Joined: Apr 2005 Member No: 128,150 |
It's reminds me of soft summer breezes (haha, that was obvious). Such a nice poem, I say go for it. Try some more poems, and who knows? It might make it in the cB's newspaper issue.
 Good luck. |
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| *SimplePlan_Luvr* |
Jun 24 2005, 11:06 PM
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submitted it 2 da cb newpaper thang lol thxs 4 reminding mee lol
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Jul 9 2005, 01:55 AM
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Mr. Hottie Group: Member Posts: 406 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 104,225 |
sort of warm poem, botanic life. i love nature's seasons.
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