A shower, is more than a shower. |
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 Apr 11 2005, 03:48 AM
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 hello : )  Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139  |
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| *islandgirl4eva* |
Apr 11 2005, 03:55 AM
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Again, I tip my hat to you darling. You take the simple act of showering and turn it into a life altering event. I live it!
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| *stephinika* |
Apr 11 2005, 08:24 AM
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^^
again agreed! i love this. its a powerful piece about something so simple, yet you write about it so very well. |
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Apr 11 2005, 12:50 PM
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 This is all my luck, it's all I got. Group: Member Posts: 1,373 Joined: Dec 2004 Member No: 76,532 |
Wow. Its great and just like the two people above me said, you make something so simple sound so important. =]
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Apr 11 2005, 01:00 PM
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 "(A.k.a. H.K.T.)" Group: Member Posts: 202 Joined: Mar 2005 Member No: 110,787 |
ok..........
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Apr 11 2005, 01:11 PM
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hello : ) Group: Official Member Posts: 4,227 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 13,139 |
Thanks you three for the comments.
QUOTE(Negi @ Apr 11 2005, 12:00 PM) ok..........  Please don't leave me worthless spam-like comments like that. kthx. |
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Apr 11 2005, 02:54 PM
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QUOTE(M1SSxCHR1SSY @ Apr 11 2005, 2:48 AM) [font=Arial]A shower. Something so simple. It seems like just an everyday thing. It's not to me though. It's my haven, my refuge. Where I go to get away from the rest of the world. From the world that causes pain, suffering, stress, pressure. From the world that seems to hate me so much. People must think I'm so clean. Since I take showers so often. But why do I take them? It's because I'm dirty. Because I'm rotten, filthy, dirty. I try to clean myself. To rinse away the pain. But rarely do I leave with all of me feeling flawless. I spend most of the time washing my face with my tears. I get the shampoo in my eye and it only makes things worse. I cut myself while shaving and see this liquid leak out. It's blood. My blood. I need to be cleaned yet here I am making more of a mess. I shower to get away, to think. To finally get some free time to myself without intrusions from my cell phone or my pesky siblings. I like feeling the warm water trickle down my back. It almost massages all the knots in my shoulders. Helping relieve me of stress and the everyday pressures of life. I close my eyes and let the water run on my face and mix with the tears. Sometimes I just sit there and let it rain down on me. No one knows these secrets. No one knows my reasoning. My parents just think I'm wasting water each time I shower. Little do they know that as I shower a part of me goes down the drain. That part of my soul feels cleansed and rejuvenated. I like staying in the shower for long amounts of time. The longer the better because I have so much to wash away, so much to think about. Then the water starts to turn cold and suddenly I'm pulled back into reality. I remember that I can't escape these thigns for too long. So I turn the shower off, grab the towel, dry myself, and walk out; knowing that no one knows my secret. That no one would ever be able to tell that more than just my skin was being cleansed. font] That was a wonderfully clear depiction of what a shower is to you, and what I'm sure it is to many of us who need to escape the ugliness of the world. I've said this once and I'm saying it before, you're a hell of a writer; more than you give yourself credit for. |
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Apr 11 2005, 04:16 PM
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 i've never wanted anything rationale. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 8,449 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 19,045 |
QUOTE(Negi @ Apr 11 2005, 11:00 AM) ok.......... Go the hell away n00b. Christina, it is amazing! You are a wonderful writer and are extremely descriptive. Ps- I think we share the same secret 
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Apr 11 2005, 09:22 PM
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Brie Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 10,172 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,548 |
Once again...Lovely, lovely work, Chrissy.
I really like reading your writing. Very descriptive, it painted a picture in my mind. I like the words you chose. 
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Apr 11 2005, 09:44 PM
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You're an amazing writer. I love how you turned one simple thing into something that descibes so much detail. Once again, wonderful work =]
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Apr 12 2005, 12:17 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 913 Joined: Feb 2005 Member No: 101,212 |
I love it.
It actually captured me attention because I was just skimming through posts, and your post captured my attention completely. Good Job on the poem! 
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Apr 12 2005, 08:25 AM
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 fell in love with a boy Group: Member Posts: 523 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 16,965 |
I really the way you wrote it... I can relate, so that made me like it even more. Good job, Chrissy? I don't know if we've been introduced. I'm Lindsey.
Nice to read your work... Ciao, Lindsey |
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