i shouldn't of let you go |
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 Nov 7 2004, 09:37 PM
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 hi, my name is brianna! =]  Group: Official Member Posts: 5,764 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,114  |
I think of you each morning,
And dream of you every night, I wish that you were here, Holding me closely tight, But all my dreams are shattered, I knew that you were right, I shouldn't of let you go, 'Cuz you were all my life. Okay..not the best poem, but I tried. x] |
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Nov 7 2004, 09:50 PM
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 jellyfishing, jellyfishing Group: Member Posts: 1,174 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 55,185 |
nice poem!! great choice of words n nice rhyming!!
 lol if only i could write a poem like that *sigh* 
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Nov 7 2004, 11:47 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Very good. Maybe you should take out "all" in the last line. It doesn't seem to fit very well.
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Nov 8 2004, 12:56 AM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
Aww.. You let go of Mr. Right.
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Nov 8 2004, 01:37 AM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
The puppy avatar goes GREAT with the poem.
 Cute. Yeah, either drop the 'all' or change it to 'my entire life' |
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Nov 20 2004, 10:32 AM
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 Stay Cheezin Group: Member Posts: 56 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,829 |
ur poem was very touching and i felt your feelings through your words...i especially know how hard it feels to let go of someone whos been part of your life..=)
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Nov 20 2004, 01:42 PM
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hi, my name is brianna! =] Group: Official Member Posts: 5,764 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,114 |
Thanks for all the feedback.
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