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| *CrackedRearView* |
 Oct 28 2004, 04:11 PM
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I was sitting in solitude today, pondering the circumstances by which she spends her time with me. And then I just sat in stupefaction at what a beautiful creature I had to call my own; the sheer implausible fact that someone so talented, intelligent, and absolutely ravishing would have her eyes set on a jackass like myself threw me into violent throes of utter, and elicit disbelief.
It was a breezy Thursday night at the train station in downtown Kansas City where I came upon the most entrancing person I had ever been given the privelege of gazing upon, and it hit me, literally. Into the air flew books, coffee, bags and purses, along with dignity and egocentrism. And then she looked at me, and it killed me. I marveled at the perfection of her face, and I reveled rudely at her stunning aura, completely incognizant and unaware of the fact that I had been blankly boring at her supreme emanation for the better part of a minute. Hello, and she broke the silence. When a beautifully mixed combination of organs, blood, skin, and personality can complete a person's life beyond the confinement of prudence, the wonder of life finally incandesces far beyond what you could fathom. Her face incandesces in my life every hour with far more luminosity and tinder than any star aloof in the sky. It's all about her love -- it's all about her ability to put my puzzle together... It's all about serendipity, sweet, sweet serendipity.... |
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Oct 28 2004, 04:17 PM
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catastrophic sweetness  Group: Member Posts: 92 Joined: Oct 2004 Member No: 58,334 |
It's beautiful. And a good break away from the poetry that most people write.
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Oct 28 2004, 04:22 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
You never seem to disappoint mang!!=] very good.
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Oct 28 2004, 04:56 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
QUOTE MasteRxxKiD (2:39:33 PM): Psh, f*cking Romantic serendipity...Gotta love that. MasteRxxKiD (2:39:36 PM): ::Sighs:: MasteRxxKiD (2:39:54 PM): True story, yes? MuyJustin (2:40:01 PM): it's a big change from my recent writings. MuyJustin (2:40:07 PM): I'm in a great mood lately. MuyJustin (2:40:15 PM): yeah this happened a few months ago MasteRxxKiD (2:42:02 PM): Love the piece...it's good to steer away from your usual style...especially when it's for the better. --- I need not comment anymore. Good job. I love it. Loved the intro, the details, word choice, etc. |
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Nov 1 2004, 09:33 PM
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 dizzy me up. Group: Member Posts: 3,191 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 11,139 |
wow, i love it. its so .. wow .
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Nov 16 2004, 11:58 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,634 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,631 |
wow...it's great. yea..like the person above said...a break from all that poetry..*shudder. so thank u! :)
im more into free writing in paragraph form than poems. |
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| *stephinika* |
Nov 17 2004, 02:12 AM
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beautiful. i love the way it was written and i love the word serendipity.
 great work. 
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| *Azarel* |
Jan 14 2006, 05:30 AM
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This is such a sweet, idealistic piece. So answer me this: how could a "jackass" write something as beautiful and loving as this?
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Jan 14 2006, 06:13 AM
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 Yawn Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,530 Joined: Nov 2004 Member No: 65,772 |
It's perfect.
I think this is the best piece i've read in a long time. I don't even know what to say to this. Amazing... |
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