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 Oct 22 2004, 11:27 AM
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 creepy heather  Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580  |
eee, this was a quick write i did on word after reading some walt whitman...
Apostrophe He teemed the soul from my breast Through a perfect hole Penetrated with his boughs Of robust (yet hollow) steal To the upper left muscle Buried beneath my bone, And I keep choking, Now, on the remnants of My soul’s hot liquid, At once spilling Between his lips And coveting the apple In caramel delight He is the apostrophe, Before my name, Of security, promised, By the “apostrophe ‘s’” |
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Oct 24 2004, 02:05 PM
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 Can't have the hand without the cock. Group: Member Posts: 2,481 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 50,622 |
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Oct 22 2004, 11:27 AM) Between his lips And coveting the apple In caramel delight  seems romantic ? (i cant think of the word) But yeah its good. and i love those lines 
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Oct 24 2004, 09:23 PM
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 hi, my name is brianna! =] Group: Official Member Posts: 5,764 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 22,114 |
Wow, sounds really creative and mysterious. I love it!
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Oct 24 2004, 10:49 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Whitman rocks...
Yet another good submission from you. Keep em coming. |
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Oct 25 2004, 12:21 PM
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creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
QUOTE(jambaJUICE @ Oct 24 2004, 2:05 PM) seems romantic ? (i cant think of the word) But yeah its good. and i love those lines yes i tend to get romantic in my poetry without inteding too...it bothers me some times lol but thanks
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Mar 18 2005, 12:21 PM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 1,634 Joined: Jul 2004 Member No: 27,631 |
OOOOOH
He is the apostrophe, Before my name, i loved that line! |
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Mar 18 2005, 07:11 PM
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 crushed. Group: Staff Alumni Posts: 9,432 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 20,026 |
wow, I love the "caramel" line a lot.
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