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 Oct 20 2004, 07:38 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
having eyes as bright as the sky
your spirit so strong and a soul thats free the smile on your face is as glamorous as the sea just to hold you so tight, id give everything up ill throw away everything i have just to be with you to prove to you our love is more important than aything else id be that man to cheer you up everytime you frown ill be the one to pick you up everytime you fall im not like everyone else thats just comes and go i wont leave u stranded or ever leave your side ill show you the kind of love u want and deserve wheres its just me and you holding hands under the starlit sky a place where nothing is wrong and every thing is right id do whatever i can ill promise everything to you, the love and desire if i can just be your man feeling down and under today so heres my lito poem hope you like |
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Oct 20 2004, 07:40 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
That's good pretty straight forward. Oh and I hope you cheer up to man.
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Oct 20 2004, 08:36 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
heheh thnx man
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Oct 21 2004, 04:50 PM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
i like how the poem begins :] i think this is one of your better love poems, too
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Oct 21 2004, 08:21 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
thnx !! yeh im glad im outta of rhyming.. i think u can express your self more with words that doesnt rhyme and your also not struggling to find a word to rhyme wuth next ooh and i think this is the only piece i think u actually like than my others lol thnx
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