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cb=bullshit.  Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793  |
-- This was written during a lengthy lecture about Congress and the government. It was hard to concentrate because my teacher is loud when he speaks... but I tried. So here it goes...
[Look at me, I'm Mel and I'm lazy and I make Joe do everything I say!]  A Beautiful Disaster She stared up at the canopy of lights that hung above her falling down... down on top of her. It crashed on her life, pulling everything in deeper into the darkness of a sweet solitude. Flooding everything around her into a familiar misery and the lights swam out towards the others; those who mattered and also build off apathy. Yet, there were the observers who watched from the sidelines in awe; the destruction of an already beautiful life. But the darkness continued to collapse, folding upon a pitiful soul, drowning her in the glamour of beauty. Something she has always hoped for ….A beautiful disaster with a dark and envied enchantment. Her eyes grew lifeless but a supernova seemed to occur within them, an allured explosion, which then took the place of the previous flames. Waiting for the next person vulnerable enough, in which the cycle would continue…Always leaving from the drapery of radiance, into a beautiful, yet, pleasing disaster. Bleh.  --cB is being gay.... again... |
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Oct 18 2004, 09:51 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
It's alright, not your best work, but it's good.
The beginning is awkward. Might wanna fix that. 
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Oct 18 2004, 09:53 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Oct 18 2004, 8:51 PM) It's alright, not your best work, but it's good. The beginning is awkward. Might wanna fix that. YOU FIX IT FOR ME, FOOL.... you know my password... i'm lazy... and i suck at life.. omg i suck [slits wrists] |
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Oct 18 2004, 10:01 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
o_O
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Oct 18 2004, 10:10 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Yeah, couples are weird.
I had to edit that for her.  I don't mind though, really. 
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Oct 18 2004, 10:42 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
aww its like your her bytch.....if thats an appropriate word lol j/p but yeh i understand how couples go lol and both of you are just JOE AND MEL lol
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Oct 18 2004, 10:43 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
Haha, but we're so cute together!
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Mar 18 2005, 12:29 PM
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QUOTE(omg_melface @ Oct 18 2004, 9:53 PM) YOU FIX IT FOR ME, FOOL.... you know my password... i'm lazy... and i suck at life.. omg i suck [slits wrists]  hahahahahaha that was funny :) |
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Mar 18 2005, 07:10 PM
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aw, I thought it good. =)
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Aug 9 2005, 03:57 PM
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I hate to repeat myself, but here it is anyway. You have a way with words; I wish you'd post up some recent writings.
The despair of the piece shines through. |
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