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 Oct 15 2004, 10:50 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer*  Group: Official Member Posts: 1,216 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134  |
waking up in the dead of silence
looking around for pieces of a past feeling hopeless, theres nothing to find built up with rage im a bull seeing red going crazy in the dead of this silence my mind losing control, the circuit breaks time has stopped, feeling so scared cant move my body, cant move my soul falling to the floor closing my eyes in a deep sleep in my cold surrounding opening my eyes realizing what happened trapt in my own mind time hasnt moved the dead of silence was nothing but a trick played by ones mind and imagination tending to lose track of time and motion the mind is a cautious place if not used right my writing piece no title |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:20 PM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
QUOTE(dispn0ygonekrazy @ Oct 15 2004, 10:50 PM) falling to the floor closing my eyes in a deep sleep in my cold surrounding opening my eyes realizing what happened trapt in my own mind time hasnt moved i digg it. but i dont get that part. anyways still i like it. |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:23 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
I've got a title for you.
'The Dead of Silence' |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:29 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,216 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
what i mean by that
falling to the floor closing my eyes in a deep sleep in my cold surrounding opening my eyes realizing what happened trapt in my own mind time hasnt moved when yur lost in your own mind ex. day dreaming it seems like time has gone by so fast but waking up ex "opening my eyes realizing what happened" you know now that it may seem like a long time has gone by but time hasnt bidged a bit.. hope u understand it more now lol joe hmm that should be the title then lol |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:43 PM
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aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
oh woops what i meant to say was hmm.. haha. i cant think of the right word. but thanks for the explaination.
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Oct 15 2004, 11:44 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,216 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol no problem
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Oct 15 2004, 11:59 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Interesting piece as always. You seem to have a lot of different sides to you when you write poetry. A dark side(style of writing) and a happy side. I don't kno why but I can't really write dark pieces usually happy ones as you've noticed
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Oct 16 2004, 12:18 AM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,216 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lol different sides are good show u can write something other than 1 topic
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Dec 26 2006, 07:16 PM
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 chinky Group: Official Designer Posts: 2,566 Joined: Jul 2006 Member No: 434,437 |
holy crap, fashizzleess!
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