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 Oct 13 2004, 11:19 PM
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 Will write poetry for sex!  Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600  |
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Oct 13 2004, 11:25 PM
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te quiero Group: Banned Posts: 2,586 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,678 |
I like that. I felt like i was in my lit class, trying to dissect that. Good job. you made me think.
 
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Oct 13 2004, 11:57 PM
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 creepy heather Group: Official Member Posts: 4,208 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 41,580 |
nice, i love inspirational moments, they are hard to come by
any way, the poem is awesome, its real poetry ... QUOTE I stared at despair etched on predictions windowpane And reflecting off with the hint of city night sky was The poetry of myself. those lines are superb! and i love your descriptions :) great work |
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Oct 14 2004, 12:12 AM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Thanks...I worked on it earlier tonight, and I had a lot going through my head that I could work with.
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Oct 14 2004, 12:37 AM
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 aiko Nakamura at your service Group: Member Posts: 1,518 Joined: May 2004 Member No: 18,144 |
QUOTE(Heathasm @ Oct 13 2004, 11:57 PM) nice, i love inspirational moments, they are hard to come by any way, the poem is awesome, its real poetry ... those lines are superb! and i love your descriptions :) great work definately. i could see the entire scene but with me instead of you of course haha. but yea REAL. |
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Oct 14 2004, 12:58 AM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Wow, such high praise.
I'm beginning to think this is one of the best pieces I've submitted here. |
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Oct 15 2004, 09:02 PM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
[bump]
yeah, I like it. =] <3 |
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Oct 15 2004, 10:15 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
lolz good job
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Oct 15 2004, 11:33 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Nothing in particular, guys?
Damn, I thought I had something going with this one. |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:43 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Oct 13 2004, 11:19 PM) My lips, softly outlined with caught tears began to read - That is possibly my favorite line. Such detail. Honestly I like it but I'm going to have to reread it several times before I can completely comprehend what it means. |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:48 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
It's actually pretty simple, but I'm glad you like it.
It's an image of myself that I've pictured (I don't usually find myself in front of a mirror when I'm crying), and wanted to use. |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:51 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
Oh, I see. Such meaning in such a short line. lol I don't kno who would cry in front of a mirror. I can't even imagine myself doing something like that. I can imagine myself crying but not in front of a mirror ya kno?
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Oct 15 2004, 11:53 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Eh? No, that line had nothing to do with crying in front of a mirror!
 I was talking about myself crying, and I wanted to picture how I would look... My lips with a thin layer of shine to them, because of tears. I was saying I did this because I haven't exactly seen myself cry. |
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Oct 15 2004, 11:56 PM
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Eternal Syn Group: Member Posts: 398 Joined: Jun 2004 Member No: 24,000 |
hahah I kno. I was just talking about how crying in front of a mirror would be odd. Since you did state it in your previous post I thought I'd just add on to it. I do realize that it has nothing to do with crying in front of a mirror
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Oct 16 2004, 12:00 AM
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 scl_illmatics Group: Member Posts: 223 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 42,339 |
shit joe, thats a nice poem.
haha, i feel like im back in my h.eng class.. trying to interpret what i means.. but job well done.. thats a hell of a poem. |
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Oct 16 2004, 12:17 AM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Thanks, dude.
I'm flattered that you guys find it mysterious and hard to analyze. Didn't think I could do that to anyone with any of my work. |
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Oct 16 2004, 11:29 AM
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cb=bullshit. Group: Member Posts: 1,783 Joined: Feb 2004 Member No: 3,793 |
QUOTE(MasteRxKiD @ Oct 13 2004, 10:19 PM) The poetry of myself. 'Watching the moon At midnight, Solitary, mid-sky, I knew myself completely No part left out.' i like these parts... 1- because you are poetry... 2- because i love the moon and the night sky. 3- i'm still waiting to know myself in complete. |
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Oct 16 2004, 12:04 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
aww u two lovw birds lol what would mel do without joe o_O i wonder....
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Oct 17 2004, 09:18 AM
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 Senior Member Group: Member Posts: 937 Joined: Aug 2004 Member No: 39,476 |
Wow.
You write awesome. Everything was so detailed! I loved it. that's REAL poetry.
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Oct 17 2004, 03:38 PM
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te quiero Group: Banned Posts: 2,586 Joined: Apr 2004 Member No: 14,678 |
QUOTE(x emo screamo x @ Oct 17 2004, 9:18 AM) Wow. You write awesome. Everything was so detailed! I loved it. that's REAL poetry. um. so like. what's fake poetry? shel silverstein writes about TOTALLY different things, but its still considered poetry. anways .... its really good. it goes really deep. |
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Oct 17 2004, 04:41 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
QUOTE([X) poised,Oct 17 2004, 12:38 PM] um. so like. what's fake poetry? shel silverstein writes about TOTALLY different things, but its still considered poetry. anways .... its really good. it goes really deep. What they mean by 'real' might be how raw in emotion it is. Maybe it's my poems syntax and usage of different things like imagery and metaphor. Or maybe they meant 'real' the same way the word 'deep' would be used. In my opinion, anything and everything is poetry. Yes, I agree, Silverstein writes little rhymes that are considered poetry. But I guess it can also depend on your definition of poetry. I'll now quote myself from what I wrote in my little writing notebook... "I don't write poetry..I AM poetry." Eh, I'm bored, so why don't I just show you my notebook, just for kicks.  I write backwards...The bottom picture is the back, but that's where I start. Anyway, I'm glad you like my poem. Maybe the ones who made that comment can clarify what they mean? ::Shrugs:: I don't know. Man, what a rather large post. Why do I have to be so damn random at times? 
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Oct 17 2004, 07:51 PM
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*Influential Guitarist & Inspiring Writer* Group: Official Member Posts: 1,217 Joined: Sep 2004 Member No: 51,134 |
BUMP IT JOE!!! hey i write backwards too i also write from bottom to top so ur reading my page from the bottom to where it ends at the top lol
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Oct 17 2004, 08:12 PM
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Will write poetry for sex! Group: Member Posts: 1,110 Joined: Jan 2004 Member No: 600 |
Damn, that's insane.
I guess I could read something like that though...That's just too much of a hassle if you ask me. Haha, whatever works for you. |
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